Humanity's Game

I was inspired to write this by all of the violence going on in the world right now. It needs to stop; we're slowly but surely destroying ourselves.

Humanity's Game

Somewhere far beyond this Earth, in a plateau of thorns

Are what remains of my heart, and object corrupted and worn

By the rampant rancor roaring down in my core

Ignited by the ancient angels of war

But today I escape this fierce firestorm forevermore

For I cannot bear this hell anymore

We have awoken a leviathan we struggle to keep tame

This violence has become a part of humanity's game

Let the tears of tomorrow rain down onto all this hate 

So that these flames can finally flicker and fade away

Once innocent kids have been clad in red by chaos and death

How're we the victorious valiant, when we have only bloodshed left?

We're all the pathetic prisoners of Destruction's relentless wrath

We fall further into this darkness as more sand slips through the hourglass

Our valentine's name will be lament

If we don't get ourselves off of this path

We have awoken a leviathan we struggle to keep tame

This violence has become a part of humanity's game

Let the tears of tomorrow rain down onto all this hate

So that these flames can finally flicker and fade away

I can see stars falling all around me

My heart beats with the fury of a thousand screams

And the voices have made me aware

Of the devils and demons that have us all ensnared 

If we don't escape the children of Grimm

We will be nothing more than monsters until the end

We have awoken a leviathan we struggle to keep tame

This violence has become a part of humanity's game

Let the tears of tomorrow rain down onto all this hate

So that these flames can finally flicker and fade away 

Author's Note

As usual, tell me what you think of this!

Reviews

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

"Are what remains of my heart, and object corrupted and worn" - Comma or "and" not both.

I like the overallmessage of the poem and the way it is written, a very nice flow. However the repetition works better for song lyrics it ruins the poem in my opinon as poems should not have a chorus.

[DoormanDan]

This is meant to be a song, not a poem. It can be hard to tell, since this website doesn't have "song" as an option under the type of writing. Thanks for pointing out the and, that was an accidental typo. It was meant to be "an". I'm glad you liked this song. Thanks for reviewing! :)

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Anytime :) as a song this works really well!

[Ana B.]

This is a very intense and strong write. Gorgeous and raw. Like life is....

[DoormanDan]

I was really going for an intense atmosphere with this song, and I'm glad it worked. Thanks for reviewing it :)

[rudelizard]

Incredibly raw and visceral. I truly enjoyed the poem. Excellent work Doorman!

[DoormanDan]

I appreciate both the review and the kind words. Thanks :)

[Matching Socks]

This was very good doorman dan. Incredibly powerful and sadly true.

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you like this. Thanks for reviewing it :)

[Cool Girl]

Wow, this is deep, man. I like the ending! Nice job!

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you liked it CG. I was inspired to write this by the song Bring Me to Life by Evanescence. :)

[Cool Girl]

Cool! :) ( Ugh I don't like ho wyou have to writ ea certain amout! I never know what to say! )

[DoormanDan]

When in doubt.....dslbgnjreahn gb vrlenvjr;flemgndor;ew gnaer;wlgnjvrwev;:)

[Cool Girl]

haha:) iifjij8erhihuhufwe89djeuh7wu9dhuyrehfisuoij

[DoormanDan]

TAKE THAT WRITERSCAFE RULE FOR REVIEW WRITING!!! :)

[Lizardo]

Pretty deep, This another great poem from you, I like the beginning of it
As always, Great writting!

[DoormanDan]

Thanks Lizardo :)

[Lizardo]

You are welcome :)

[Valentine]

I am beginning to think you need to be writing adventure tales for books or the movies. You are very talented. Kathie

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for the compliment! i have thought about it, but i always either get writers block or i lose interest.

[Stephanie K.]

Another amazing piece! This one would make a terrific song! Destruction is something everyone does everyday, we just don't realize it. The good thing about it is with all the bad comes the good, every rose has its thorn. Keep continuing to share.

P.s: I'm impressed with how quickly you can write new work. A talent many don't possess.

[DoormanDan]

Thanks! actually, most of what ive put on this site is stuff i wrote a while ago. The newest one, which i wrote jus 2 days ago, is If I Disappeared. Lately the time between songs ive written is at least 2 weeks because of school. I wrote this one around 2 months ago.

[Stephanie K.]

It's definitely hard to be able to write and keep up with school. Regardless though, I'm still impressed. :)

[DoormanDan]

Thank you. You're so kind :)