Empty Mirrors

When we can't see our own reflections, we cannot tell what we have become

Empty Mirrors

Here I am again, underneath a crescent moon

My civil war has left me covered in wounds

From my self-doubt I cannot take refuge

Can somebody save me?  I know not what I should do!

Somebody help me

Bring this solar eclipse in my head to an end

So I can finally see what kind of man I am

A million miles of walking blind has me longing for light

I want to cast this failure away, into the fine cracks of time

Tell me, am I a man that I can truly defend?

Can you clear away the nebula that I am in?

Can somebody at last pull me out of this raging river

And return my reflection to these empty mirrors?

The starlight fades as shadows float over

It getting harder to see with every hour

Regret is a quicksand that's pulling me under

Will somebody save me from these meteor showers?

Somebody help me

Bring this solar eclipse in my head to an end

So I can finally see what kind of man I am

A million miles of walking blind has me longing for light

I want to cast this failure away, into the fine cracks of time

Tell me, am I a man that I can truly defend?

Can you clear away the nebula that I am in?

Can somebody at last pull me out of this raging river

And return my reflection to these empty mirrors?

Shine a radiant light across the barren mountain ranges of my mind

So that I can see the distant dreams for which I have strived

Somebody help me

Bring this solar eclipse in my head to an end

So I can finally see what kind of man I am

A million miles of walking blind has me longing for light

I want to cast this failure away, into the fine cracks of time

Tell me, am I a man that I can truly defend?

Can you clear away the nebula that I am in?

Can somebody at last pull me out of this raging river

And return my reflection to these empty mirrors?

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think!

Reviews

[J.C. Rabanes]

I enjoyed your works man... so creative and the lines, well, It's superb... thanks for the RR... hope to read these kind of poem again. :)
JC Rabanes

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad that you like my work JC, you are welcome, and thank you for reviewing this :)

[jeannemarie coulter]

i always enjoy your work and this is no exception...

"A million miles of walking blind has me longing for light
I want to cast this failure away, into the fine cracks of time"

these two lines really reached into my mind...there is much i would like to toss away "into the fine cracks of time"...well written and designed...

[DoormanDan]

That was one of my favorite lines to write for this poem. I'm glad you liked this, thanks for reviewing :)

[AaronFreitas]

I love the creativity... the formatting is awesome and you are truly a gifted writer my friend. Always a pleasure to read your work :)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks Aaron, for both the compliment and the review :)

[Stephen]

I really liked this poem. It was very interesting. Thanks for sharing

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you liked it, thank you for reviewing :)

[Perkele.7885]

I am interested to know the reason why you have underlined words and phrases in the next to last stanza of your poem. As I am still trying to get a handle on your style, the underlining intrigues me in this poem. I am sure that you must have a reason for using this underlining.
No matter how radiant a light is expressed in your words here in this poem, we, your readers will need more word description of your distant dreams if it is a word picture of these dreams that is what that you want to share with us!
You put a lot of energy into your poems and my mind is older and has unfortunately posted a speed limit!

[DoormanDan]

Now that I think about it, the underlined parts didn't have any meaning behind them(I wrote this song a long time ago, back when I thought that over the top chaos and cramming as much as I could into everything was the best way to go. Thankfully, I've matured somewhat since then, and I know when I'm doing too much. This song was written back when the style I use now was a fairly new one, and I was still working out some rough edges. Not my best, but hey, what better purpose does the past serve that to teach us a better way to approach the future? Thanks for reviewing :)

[Perkele.7885]

Thank you Dan for bearing with me while I latch on to all things new while still occupying my comfort zone.

[DoormanDan]

No problem :)

[TelamVitae]

I love this poem, but the difference in the size of the words can get a bit distracting at times. Perhaps if they were a bit closer to the same font, that would fix it? I love the language and the theme you're getting across. Well done.

[DoormanDan]

I can understand how the font size changes can get distracting, but the different font sizes are meant to make it more exciting and more likely to keep the readers interest(I'll see how it looks if I change some of the font sizes a bit). Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you like it :)

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

Many metaphors made this a marvelous magical mind blowing masterpiece...

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for taking the time to review this. I'm really glad it was to your liking :)

[AprilRN1210]

This has a song-like quality to it.. I agree with the other reviewers, it is creative and unique.. the repetition fits nicely and I like the buildup feel to the piece... imagery was done nicely and added to the power of the prayer for help..

"
Shine a radiant light across the barren mountain ranges of my mind
So that I can see the distant dreams for which I have strived
Somebody help me"... these are the lines that stood out the most for me... overall, nicely done.. I think a lot of us can relate to those feelings at one time or another..

[DoormanDan]

Out of all the songs and poems I have ever written, this one was my favorite, but I never expected it to get the great reception its gotten. Thank you for reviewing my work. Ill make sure I return the favor :)

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome and was no favor, you are talented and was my pleasure..

[lydie]

This is such a creative and unique poem! This really shows how some one can feel so alone and lonely and sad.

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reviewing this lydie! I try to be as original as i can be :)

[Wandering Bookman]

I love this poem, DoormanDan. It's great the way you have blended nature and space-that works really well.
You are a talented young writer-I have been reading your other poems. Keep up the good work.

[DoormanDan]

I really appreciate you popping over here to read and review my writing! I'll make sure to check out some of your writing. :)