Regret

Regret

A Poem by Darkwaters

 

Regret

 
 

I am angry this good night
for my foolishness of fancy flight

Ghoulish pleasure in my dread
as I am to be fed

upon the stories of woe
no soul should ever know

I've run with pack of the sad
I do grow tired of being mad

hoping for some small glimmer
of that girl that did shimmer

I was light as a feather in the day
Now I only have a lot to say

I had nary a thought to my name
but still it's really all the same

I've moved beyond my gallant ideal
now it's all about the next meal

Marking time with passing thought
I do so grow tired of being fraught

In to the future cast mine eye
some day, for sure, I shall die.

Is it really worth the regret
of all that I have beget?

The answer comes swift upon the tide
no, my darling girl, regret is for those who hide.

© 2008 Darkwaters


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I love the last line. The juxtaposition of 'darling girl' and a very sound advice is very effective.

Also, your rhyme scheme made reading a pleasure. I don't believe that a poem should always rhyme; otherwise it'll sound very contrived. But in this case, your simple rhyming and regulated pace gave your poem a sense of wholeness.

I love this!

Thanks for sharing.

Loves,
Raven

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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I like the form and the rhyme, and the message that it has.

I really enjoyed the last three stanzas

"In to the future cast mine eye
some day, for sure, I shall die.

Is it really worth the regret
of all that I have beget?

The answer comes swift upon the tide
no, my darling girl, regret is for those who hide."



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BEUTIFUL! very touching

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very sad, and touching. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great read. Loved the flow between the stanzas and the rhyme was beautiful. Thanks for letting me read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great write, words fit together like a hand and a glove. I love the flow of this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I do like the simplicity and rhythm of a good rhyme. Sometimes our thoughts just tend to lend themselves to this as well. It is better to go with the flow than force things too much.

This does not sound forced and I, too, love the last lines!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I love the last line. The juxtaposition of 'darling girl' and a very sound advice is very effective.

Also, your rhyme scheme made reading a pleasure. I don't believe that a poem should always rhyme; otherwise it'll sound very contrived. But in this case, your simple rhyming and regulated pace gave your poem a sense of wholeness.

I love this!

Thanks for sharing.

Loves,
Raven

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

very well written ... lots of good images flow through this poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

good job...keep it up! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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