Sacrafice

 

If I had fallen upon my knees
prostrating myself before the alter
of his ego I would ache in my soul

Inside and out of this shell
I drip with seething anger
a rage so deep I am rooted

The unsettling truth has dried and cracked
kept me from sleep, twisting in pain
to understand the unforgiveable.

Was she so sweet in her adoration
like a sirens song calling him to shipwreck
I was, Circe, my warnings to be ignored

No, I was the doomed Cassandra
the gift of sight not to be heeded
knowing the end before it began.

It was all so simple, so easy
and forgettable to him
but blackened in me is the sad, sad truth

Raw and bitter fruits I have swallowed
all in the name of love that grew so hallow
When did the words die of their meaning?

It was upon the alter of mans ego I died
ashes to ashes and dust to dust
a sacrifice in unholy thoughts

Reviews

[G. Cedillo]

great allusions, anything with Cassandra in it has me gushing - a fan of the ancient poems -
here's a great line i liked: "a rage so deep I am rooted" - - there are others, but that one stood out for some reason.
why the shifting sex of the pronouns, i understand there may be different voices/speakers but it would help if that were clarified a bit --
thanks for sharing this, keep writing and i'll keep reading
g.

[xXx JakBeNimble xXx]

wonderful

[Suki]

Too many women have to undergo the focus of this piece. Dark thoughts, HELL YES! I can think of stuff like rusty old kitchen knives that have been left out in the garden since last fall's trimming!

Wonderfully done. I like how you infer that communication was not lacking; even regards to this subject before it's event.

[gone]

I like this. It's dark but so what, right? I might be tempted to play with the line structures a bit, but that's just me. The use of alter/ego is cool (if that's not intentional, you spelled altar wrong, heh).
I don't usually go in for the "dark side" but this is pretty powerful stuff and comes across well. I might suggest a bit of a polish, but just a quick buff. You needn't break out your toothbrush or anything.
Great work.
Merely another opinion on the seas of perception,
BSC