Do You Dare?

...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem....a different kind of poem....a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem....

There's only death here;

there's only pain.

Why are you looking

among the insane?

They are just the shadows,

lurking in the shallows;

nothing but your friends,

wanting to reach new ends.

They want to meet you sooner;

they want to be your tuner.

They just want to lend

a helpful hand to send.

There's nothing hopeful;

there's nothing bright.

Why do you look in

the dark for light?

They just want to follow,

flying like a swallow.

Reaching for tomorrow,

filling you with sorrow.

They just want to talk to

and eventually walk you

up the road of thought

where memories are shot.

There's only chaos;

there's only harm.

Why do you cower

and look alarmed?

Why are you now crying?

Surely, you're not dying.

Why, then, are you weeping?

Pain has begun sleeping;

you are free from its grasp.

Why, then, do you now gasp?

What do you see behind you?

What do you see that you knew?

These are the people;

this is the place.

What will you do when

they touch your face?

Surely, they will not harm you;

surely, they would not dare.

Surely, they will not scare you;

surely, they touch your hair,

but never meant to harm you,

and never meant to scare.

Whenever they touch you,

think of it as a dare.

Do you dare to follow?

Do you dare to meet?

Do you dare to follow

walking memory street?

Author's Note

...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem....Do You Dare?...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem

Reviews

[TalesOFaMadman]

I'm new and this poem is one of the first works I read on this site. It's awesome I like it.

[Not here]

great :) this site really is the best

[KittyKatgirl]

This is amazing :) I absolutely loved it and the use of rhyme astounds me. Another great poem of yours :)

[Not here]

thank you crystal madden :) i appreciate it alot

[KittyKatgirl]

No problem any time. I owe you from all the reviews and helpful advice you've given me :)

[Not here]

lol no i think its the other way around

[KittyKatgirl]

Haha no you reviewed every single thing I wrote and I've only done a few of yours.

[Not here]

yeah but ive done way too many

[KittyKatgirl]

Haha true lol

[Not here]

yeah mon totes

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem.
"Do you dare to follow?
Do you dare to meet?
Do you dare to follow
walking memory street?"
Mystery, danger and dangerous places. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you for the review coyote :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Dante.

[kanyinsola okafor]

Indeed a different kind of poem. I'm thrilled by the intensity and in depth of the emotions expressed in your words.

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[The Waterlily Pad]

Very haunting. Thoughtful too. Seems very intense and I love the strong feeling its emits and reaches to the reader; an intense discomfort. I feel thrilled after finishing it....

The pace was just so for this poem and the atmospheric effect just seemed to slip witht the words of this rhythm! Masterpiece, like.

in recomendation of further improvement, I have no solid critisism for it although if the ending came on stronger: if you specificide something of a dare to leavr the reader hanging on to the madness of intensity then I believe it would defenitely be worth 4 more reads!! Maybe perhaps shock the reader by your capability to see through them such as : ' dare as you like, for the test of your bravery isnt what they feed to seek."
Or maybe: "maybe youll overcome the monster within your recked soul."
Or a simple , mysterious:" Go on . I dare you"
Something intensly creepy for the mind...


Or maybe a differently styled stanza. A short sweetly agonising: ♡ S E I R O M E M ♡
( Its written memories but I purposely did it in the opposite form to cause a strain, just that weird idea).

[Not here]

lol :) i looked up that word to see what it meant before i read your note at the end. and thank you very much for all of the in depth reviews lately :)

[The Waterlily Pad]

xD no problem.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Indeed, it is a different kind of poem. One of a kind and intriguing as well!

[Not here]

:) thanks. i was feeling particularly weird on this day

[Wasekera S Chiphazi Ban..]

i dare,, this is very nice ..good job i can feel the creeps when reading it...

[Not here]

thats good :) im glad lol

[AaronFreitas]

I like it my friend. love the creativity and the darkness to the write. Nice job!

[Not here]

thank you :) glad you enjoyed

[Ilerah]

I like it. Can't point out any errors grammatically. Its also so well written, really enjoyed reading this once David.

[Not here]

thanks :) im glad you liked it

[Jacklyn]

I enjoy the original style that you wrote this in, it kind of reminds me of a ritualistic chant haha very creative. :)

[Not here]

haha :) thats creepy but thank you