Hide the Way

Hide the way to my hideaway.

Follow me back to my hideaway.

It's a dark place where we'll go and stay.

Where we'll be lonely and cry today.

Sometimes there's not a single, other way.

Follow me down to a lonely place.

Everyone's mask there is a happy face.

And all around there's only standing space,

'cause there's people who they want to replace. 

Follow me up to a laughing home.

Inside they're crumbling like styrofoam.

Outside they keep a smile, always roam.

But they will never escape from that dome.

Follow me forward to the place I go.

'Cause the whole world could never ever know.

See, there's some things that happened long ago.

And they can't be fixed by a simple "Hello."

Take me to where the sad people blend.

Show me the wrists that they all try to mend.

Tell me how they survive on the weekends.

I don't understand how they all pretend.

I'll show you people who will never smile.

Some of them sit in alleys, some in aisles.

Some of them pray, while others rap freestyle.

And others hang themselves once in a while.

Author's Note

Hide the way to my hideaway.
---I'm getting to your read requests soon, I swear. This week has been ridiculously hard. For me anyways. But I'll get there.

Reviews

[dan]

This is shorter than most of your writes, david; that makes it a bit more accessible. A bit of a lighter tone also. The change in your personal life seems to be agreeing with you, you seem lighter also, in mood and write. One small suggestion? Second stanza, second line: "Everyone's mask there is a happy face." That seems a bit awkwardly worded. Maybe "Behind all masks is a happy face?" Just a suggestion...a very well conceived idea written very well. take care...dan

[Not here]

thank you dan. ill try to work on this some. im really glad you liked it. i appreciate your review. thank you.

[AaronFreitas]

I love the flow and rhyming in this one... I enjoy that style. Awesome write my friend... made me want my own hideaway :)

[Not here]

lol thanks aaron :) im really glad you liked it

[ANTO]

This could be straight from Bob Dylan's quill at the height of his powers.
Really impressive Dante. A pleasure to read and review.

[Not here]

thank you very much ANTO :) i appreciate it

[Brittany Bostic]

Wow I especially enjoy the very first and last line of this poem. This is different from your poems, though you seem to write a wide range of things. i feel this one came from a different, darker, place in your heart. Very honest, blatant writing

[Not here]

thank you very much brittany :)

[Shadowkai]

Amazing, I'm back now I swear
Sorry for my absence but this reminds me why I came back and why I started in the first place,
Keep writing Dante, I will keep reading
Your friend,
Shadowkai

[Not here]

thnk you very much shadowkai :) im glad this made u remember why u joined in the first place because ur works is always enjoyable to read

[Willard Wells]

Life goes on with pain within ourselves and in many all around us. We first have to find over middle ground and hopefully then step forward and help our fellow man. We all hide something, some more pain than others.

This is a very sad and painful write. Excellent as you often do. Peace Out.

[Not here]

thanks willard :) im glad you liked it. i appreciate your review.

[andrew mitchell]

A dark write and how we cover our tracks or ignore other's in misery, the homeless.

[Not here]

thank you andrew :) im glad you reviewed.

[andrew mitchell]

Been away on holidays so I'm catching up!

[zaisham9393]

Very well written. the rhyme scheme was perfect.
I loved this :)!

[Not here]

thank you very much :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well, it is deep, and unfortunately True!

people are the prisoner of a tendency of forgetting those in need...
thinking bout how life is bad for them, forgetting that there are other people, who live in far worse conditions... and they don't even have as much to show, as those who keep crying for no reason.

i loved it

[Not here]

thank you very much danny :) i appreciate your reviews and when you agree with me alot.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

you're welcome :D