I'll Be

  

I’ll be the friend

Who walks down the street

Hand in hand

Even if it leads

To a dead end.

 

I’ll be the dream

So when you are sleeping

The safety

Of your fears

Remains secret.

 

I’ll be the rhythm

So your heart will never

Beat alone

And those slow dances

Feels like home.

 

I’ll be the rock

When you need strength

I’ll be the wind

When you need to be alone.

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

wow darling - you've just gotten better and better as i've been away. you still have that simple, rhyming style, but you'd added layers of depth to it.

couple grammatical things - first paragraph, second line - should be WALKS

"I'll be the rhythm

So our heart will never

Beat alone

And those slow dances

Feels like home."

That's my favorite verse - btu you do need to change heart to "hearts" - make it plural.

Then the ending - about being alone and you'll be the wind? what a wonderful way to say that. As though - I'll give you your privacy, but i'll be all around you still. Lovely.

Kara

[MistyJRose]

this was awesome. A definite poem i needed to read at the moment. Thanks for posting. You are definitely an awesome poet.

[Winter McPherson]

So sweet and romantic. Sounds like song lyrics. Such a nice cadence to it. Great write!

[Ladysue]

Dale, you are such a phenomenal writer. You know how to take words and capture the exact feelings flawlessly. You do have so much depth in your writing and that is what I love about it so much!!!! :)

[Gandré]

wow.. Dale... this one I loved... so insigthful, honest, truthful... hmm you make meaning and imagination.

[TamiViolet]

I agree with the others that this is very moving, such a warm sentiment to write about seeing one through no matter what hardships they may face.

The second stanza in particular, attracts me in regard to creativity :

I'll be the dream
So when you are sleeping
The safety
Of your fears
Remains secret

Nice, my friend :-)

[emz]

Wow... love this Dale.... so delicate and beautiful that only a true cowboy could convey.


Kudos 100 times

x

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This is great Dale, takes being there for you to a new level. It's wonderfully written as usual. Real sweet and sincere writing.

[T]

Such a beautifully written, moving poem, Dale ... The world needs more people like you my sweet friend ... hugs