As I was falling...

It is a classic tale of guy meets girl, likes girl and hope girl likes him in return

When our hands first touched There was no novel-like afterwards
There was no spark
There was no knowing
There was only wonder
At how a human hand was dis tender(perfect balance, not too tender, and not slightly tough)
A few days later I saw a piece of her heart,
It didn't ring any bell, nor give any ideas
All it made me think was
How beautiful her soul is.
She walked by me and smiled
I smiled in return making it a to-do
To tell her "your heart is beautiful".
The first night I went to her house
She was again showing her beautiful heart
She was helping this old man.
Because his bones were rickety
I walked towards her and said "it" to her
She said to me same and from there it began to happen,
She asked me in for a bite of cake
I in return asked her out for dinner later
All I thought was she'd make a good friend.
Many nights later I could not sleep
I turned and turned on my giant water-bed
Still, sleep didn't come to ease my tire
I looked at my window and her image I saw
Her smile to me gave rest
I already was struck and I couldn't stop it
I didn't even want to stop it for it was pleasant to me
I tried to put my feelings to paper
But nothing came out
I thought and thought
But nothing still
So I walked to her house
With the full moon supporting
I stopped in front of her house
And I called out her name
She came out smiling
And I said "Ariel, if I couldn't see your soul, and all I could see was your smile, I'll hold it forever etched in my mind. But I see your smile and your soul, and I'm in love with you. Will you be mine and let this be true"?
To be continued.....

Reviews

[Laminators Dubai]

that was splendid...your doing a great job noel....^^

[Noeldeeptz]

Thanks Glitch

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Such passion and drive of desire,Love is an amazing thing,But whats special is seeing the love from within that's the beauty I saw in this wonderful warm write Noel:) Love it my friend!

[Noeldeeptz]

Your words are always kind, thank you Jon.

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Your very welcome my Brother

[abedua]

itz a beautiful poem. i like the fact that it is really true love.i am new and therefore i'm not sure if i'd be right to say it's a great poem but i'll say it anyway...it is a great poem!!

[Noeldeeptz]

Thanks Abedua, I'm a believer in true love and felt the desire to express it. Your words are encouraging

[abedua]

you are welcome

[JorMill]

I read this and I really liked it.
I like how it starts out without a spark or a wonder but until he sees her beautiful heart is when he cannot sleep without telling her.
I think this is wonderful and am looking forward to your next continuation.
I am also a new writer so I would not be able to tell you if it is right or not, but I did really enjoy it!

[Noeldeeptz]

Thanks JorMill, I'll get the continuation here soon.

[Noeldeeptz]

I'll like anyone that reads this to leave a review, it states to me whether you think I'm doing right or not