Untitled

Cobra spits hot venom
The angry wasp she flies
Her stingers ripping open
The fertile Cresent sky
Roaring dragon screaming
Across horizons high
Vaporizing annihilation
In her flames they die
The mutilated offerings
what's left of her flight
Flames of bone and concrete
Left burning in the night
They called to her on wireless
Begged her to fly our way
Burning manscapes to the ground
and we went on our way

Author's Note

If you like this one read my feature piece "Roaring Death Machine " It's an older piece on the same subject.

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

now words are painting, s**t you may become a hippi yet.

[Baby Ricochet]

not likely

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this description is so accurate...and yet, even if it is about war...it can be not literal, and can apply to different types of war...mental illness, relationship wars etc...

quite a soundly written poem.

jacob

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you

[writing mojo]

struggle is the war of your Untitled poem sets fire all the stupid cliche I use over and over, thank you for such a mystic pondering thought that processes through these words glowing on my screen...great piece

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you

[KeeD]

I love how you have this artistic way of describing war. The imagery spectacular. You've managed to make this huge aeronautical destructive machine seem like a dragon roaring the skies.. breathing fire on the land, scorching earth .. and saving it's own kin. Very cool BR..

[Baby Ricochet]

thank you

[Ashly Christen]

Sad, true and written beautifully, easy to read, flows well, I like, you did a good job, now I wonder what I'll dream tonight, reading this as I fall asleep

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you for the review

[chandlerl]

Really just great imagery...Nicely done

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Michael G.]

"Begged her to fly your way..."
A welcome sound, I'm sure. That's the sound of the cavalry coming to the rescue. Very descriptive write, BR. Heard it and felt it.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Tai Ryens]

Such vivid imagery assisted by your choice of words. Well done!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[That_Girl]

Your imagery is always top notch. Bravo.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Carolann Dowsett]

I can't even begin to imagine the things you have seen and experienced but it must of been a type of hell. This brings to light the horrors of war. Amazingly graphic and well written.

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome