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Writer's block? Analysis? Paralysis?

Sitting here with my phone
I don't know what to write
My girlfriend she's sound asleep
She don't stay up all night

As for me I'm wide awake
Looking for a rhyme
Trying to write this piece of crap
In fifteen minutes time

Some of my rhymes they kinda suck
And others strike a chord
I'm trying to entertain you people
To keep you from getting bored

Okay so maybe once in a while
I got something relevant to say
I guess by now you figured out
That ain't gonna happen today

So I'll just waste your pressious time
With a useless throw away rhyme
Drift off to sleep and in the morning
The world will be just fine

Author's Note

Crap, again. Maybe I'm losing it

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Perhaps you should rest your wrist for a bit. Not in that way!
Serious matters however, you've certainly got the diction and the words, just not the thought. Nice try, nonetheless.

[Baby Ricochet]

HA! Possibly. Thanks Tai

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The structure is perfect, the words unflawed but, don't take this the wrong way - theres no spirit in it, I'm used to your work having a punch behind it!

[Baby Ricochet]

It's a poem. about having no ideas so yeah it doesn't.

[Salar Majak]

do you know what i love about your poems in particular????
that they are unique!
everything you write is so original they make me want to be as original as you are!! God you make it sound soo easy!!! and you know what? this is my most favorite poem of the day

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you aurora

[KeeD]

LOL at least you made me laugh, I think I want to see you write a piece on Hannibal Lecter or some other psychopath :D with a humorous twist :P

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Keegan

[Michael G.]

Look, you've seen life and death situations. Clearly, this isn't one. No big deal.

I'm curious, what you did the day you enlisted? Checking gear before getting on the plane or ship. I know you weren't born a marine or weight lifter. Were you a snot nosed little kid from backwater S. Car.?
There are stories to tell sir. And people would like to know... whether they be true or make believe.

[Baby Ricochet]

The day I got on the bus for parris island my father had to drive me to Columbia sc to catch it. It was 4am. They did it in the wee hours of the morning to wear you out so you would be more susceptible to their influence.

[Michael G.]

True that. I remember standing in line with about a hundred guys. (Most all were draftees.) A marine Sargent went down the line alternating one/two. When he got to the end, he said for the ones to step back. I stepped back. Then he told the twos, congratulations, you are now Marines.

[Baby Ricochet]

Whenever I think of Marines and nam I think khe san and hue

[Michael G.]

They fought against great odds in both.

[Pax]

nope! your not losing it.... i lose inspiration now and then... it comes as it goes... it overwhelms me at times or i just laze around and do nothing... or write a few lines then save... but you my friend done a great job on rhyming which is not my forte....keep it up and keep writing... i know and you know it will just come smoothly in time... soon

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Mr pax

[saratogaparty]

There's nothing wrong with passing the time in rhyme, whether or not you think it's your best doesn't mean it's not good!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Saratoga

[quinfinn]

ricochet...i am in a huge slump right now. i have been pulling rhymes outta my a*s and bringing poems from the "vaults" for over a week....s**t happens. inspiration can be found anywhere, sometimes we just don't see the forest for the trees. this was a great attempt at making something outta nothing, it is entertaining to read, so there's some success ...it get's worse before it gets better, but then you'll be on fire again!

[Baby Ricochet]

Thanks man. You're the King quinfinn

[quinfinn]

anytime.....we're all friends here

[Relic]

Writers block and lack of inspiration are all a part of the show Ric. I recently posted one that got 3 reads! I'm not kidding. I'm taking time off from writing anything here for a while. My time here will be limited as well. I'll still try and write but as far as posting, you're not gonna see it.

As far as losing it, that's also one of the songs on the writers list. I've sang it myself many times. Marie has more experience than any of us, what she says is true. Good luck.

[Baby Ricochet]

3 views?! Man that blows. I recently subscribe to your writing cause I noticed you were missing. Thanks for stopping by relic. This site needs your input badly so don't stay gone to long.

[Relic]

No problem Ric.
I'm no sage that's for sure. If I can come up with something I'll share it, but for now I need to make some transitions and get some perspectives outside WC.

[Baby Ricochet]

Godspeed my friend

[Relic]

:)

[Marie]

You're trying to force instead of flow...

[Baby Ricochet]

Thank you Marie. My writing has sucked lately and my views have been even worse.