Minor Adjustments

Seduced in shame,

I was senseless,

helpless.

They sentenced me

four years

waist deep drenched 

in tears

Left me 

lusting for freedom,

by day

aching for a confidant,

someone to stay,

with me

They lined like 

an army of ants,

each day,

their faces,

peer at me,

laughing,

insulting.

The others 

whispered

silently

in their minds,

but I could 

still hear

their eyes.

One day,

I became 

consumed

in perfection;

to be flawless,

etched

in my mind.

Exhausted,

I strolled out,

contempt

invaded my lungs.

But I never wanted to be this way.

Reviews

[Theresa]

Love the stanza, "the others whispered.... but I could still hear their eyes" Absolutely love that and so true! Wow!

[demureminds]

Thank you, I'm so glad you noticed that part! I wanted to incorporate judgements not only through words but by the way people look at someone too.

[Theresa]

So many subtle judgements that others think go unnoticed.
Way to capture that!

[WintersGirl]

I really liked your style to this poem! It flowed neatly, and I could literally feel the pain the person is feeling! The words are powerful, and you timed the verses perfectly for emphasis. Great piece!

[demureminds]

Aw, thank you for this kind review! It took me forever to write this haha(: