Invisible Tangent Lines

My tears followed

invisible tangent lines 

trailed on my cheeks,

from last years waste

tasting of salty sweets,

and as I blink away 

the dampness of mist

in the haze of

chilled nights,

they hit the pavement

like hailstones on ice,

belonging to one another;

the torrent of tears

were supposed to flow.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

superb use of words, a fine poem

[Antonio Valentino]

these streams etched in flesh add paths for experience to try and avoid.. even though they usually never do.. which is okay with me.. floods are neccessary to wash out debris clogging our sensitivities..

another goody as all!

:)

[demureminds]

Thank you

[Tai Ryens]

Retracing your past is often the most painful path one can take, an amazing concept once again. Where do you come up with such brilliance on short notice?

[demureminds]

Yeah it can be, and thanks!

[TLK]

I'm not sure about lines four and five - is last year's waste supposed to taste of salty sweets? I guess that it's the tears that would be salty (of course) but the lack of punctuation keeps bringing me 'round to thinking otherwise.

[demureminds]

It's supposed to come off as a different version of "bittersweet" as in, glad it happened but you're crying over it still because it ended badly... does that make sense? And yeah i tend to experiment a lot with parallel structure and i'm just terrible with punctuation, so I understand the confusion.