I have everything I need

Everything is ok because I have everything I need. Everything in place, security. I have everything I need need need. I have everything I need need need. There are mouths to feed. I have everything I need need need. Doesn’t stop, doesn’t stop. The panic is placated. Placed in a coffin. Placed and placated. The people never leave leave leave. In this place stuck between the shadow and me. The people never leave leave leave. Multiply in the coffin. Multiply in it often. The people never leave leave leave. Take a trip and multiply. Take a trip and leave leave leave. Shackles unforeseen I am mean mean mean. Can’t appreciate the unforeseen. Back and forth. Make it clean clean clean. Eat with knife and fork. Have your folklore, have your writings in the drawer. Get on your knees knees knees. Make something so I can believe. Get on your knees knees knees. Everything is ok because I have everything I need need need.

Reviews

[deeps]

This is a very intersting write here
Like it though

[Jacki Hale]

I like this poem a lot! It sounds extremely needy with it's repetitive rhymes... I LOVED that.

One suggestion I have, to make it even more needy and whiny sounding (in the best way possible!), I would take even more of the short 'e' sound and triple every rhyme. As in - these are the words I found that I think should TOTALLY be tripled.

feed
between
me
unforseen
believe

Just a suggestion. A very sexy suggestion.

[Ama May Cooper]

Written in a very interesting way. Its rare i see poems punctuated and written in a paragraph and is interesting when i do.
Your poem questions my mind and i like that, i odnt kno if you meant it that way btu it almost seems like havng evertyhign is actually not a good thing and can lead to odd complications