Hugs

Hugs

A Poem by Elizabeth Carter
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This came to me a few months ago in a passing thought, and I just had to write it all down. :)

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When you hug someone, your heart touches theirs. 
When you kiss someone, your lips touch theirs. 
A person's heart leads straight to everything that means anything to them. 
A heart knows how a person feels. It contains their true desires and emotions.
A person's lips are the words, the part of their life that they decide to confide with others.
Those words may not always be what their heart is saying. 
I think this is why a hug feels so much better than a kiss sometimes. 
While a kiss can mean the world, sometimes, all you need is a good old-fashioned hug.

© 2013 Elizabeth Carter


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Elizabeth Carter
Couldn't come up with a good title... Oh well!

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ATG
A very good poem with a few imperfections. First off, this line could use some touch up. "When you kiss someone, your lips touch theirs." This describe what a kiss is and in comparison to first line, feels lacking. I think a diffent choice of words in the last part of that line would help the poem start off better. The last thing I would reccommend changing is removing "sometimes" from the last line. It breaks it up unnecessarily and removing it would make the line flow better. Other than that it was a very good read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Elizabeth Carter

11 Years Ago

Alright, well I'll think about it and maybe come up with something. Thanks:)
ATG

11 Years Ago

No problem. Sorry I'm not more help with it.
Elizabeth Carter

11 Years Ago

It's fine! Thanks!



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Hug reaches heart!
You are so smart!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I have to agree this tells a truth we all know in a deep way . We dont want to spend our lives alone

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very interesting poem that seems to be well thought out and flows well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

well written.. the deep message is trying to present here in a decent manner. I agree where words seem inappropriate so emotions can better play a role.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love your work its very heart full. well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Elizabeth Carter

11 Years Ago

:)
Even the anti-christ likes hugs.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Elizabeth Carter

11 Years Ago

Not sure if that's a compliment or not... hahaha
nostal

11 Years Ago

We will never know.
Elizabeth Carter

11 Years Ago

Haha okay then.
NICE....

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well said! And i understand the meaning, very true.

Hugs sometimes mean more, then just a kiss.

-Amazing! (keep it up)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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ATG
A very good poem with a few imperfections. First off, this line could use some touch up. "When you kiss someone, your lips touch theirs." This describe what a kiss is and in comparison to first line, feels lacking. I think a diffent choice of words in the last part of that line would help the poem start off better. The last thing I would reccommend changing is removing "sometimes" from the last line. It breaks it up unnecessarily and removing it would make the line flow better. Other than that it was a very good read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Elizabeth Carter

11 Years Ago

Alright, well I'll think about it and maybe come up with something. Thanks:)
ATG

11 Years Ago

No problem. Sorry I'm not more help with it.
Elizabeth Carter

11 Years Ago

It's fine! Thanks!

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Added on January 1, 2013
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Elizabeth Carter
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My writing come from my heart, and my emotions, and I hope that you will be able to connect with it, and enjoy reading it! I don't try to stick to any way of writing so my work will more than likely b.. more..

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