In the Rain

 

Blonde hair, blue eyes

We stare up into the sky

Wishing on a rain cloud

As the thunder roars loud

Trees sway in the wind

As we start to spin

In the rain, in the rain

Trees sway

Sky and ground collide

Lightening brightens the world

As we twirl

The wind sings

It's sad tale of loss, false love

And lies, lies, lies

You know you and I, you and I

We will fly

Away from here

Away from fear

No more tears, no more, no tears

The rain peirces me like knives

Blonde hair, blue eyes

In the rain, in the rain

Trees sway

Author's Note

Thanks for reading, please review and rate. I'm trying to get to a 95% rating! :) (I do not own the picture)

Reviews

[Palmer Blu]

This piece is definitely an attention grabber! The poem opens up with such description that it makes me yearn for more. The repetition in this poem is great, which is shocking because repetition can sometimes destroy the piece. The words are placed brilliantly and this is a key factor when writing poetry. Every image that you attempt to paint is pulled off flawlessly and I commend you that. Overall this ia great poem and you are clearly an amazing poet!

[Sweets]

Wow. This poem is wonderful!
It's so heartfelt :)
Wonderful work!

[BeetleBug]

Interesting.

[Michael Lopez]

it works well for me...
its hard for me to do a review...
but i really liked this...
imagery is good.
it could even b a song, with the rhyme thats thrown in.

[Akshat♥]

Poem is awesome...
i really liked it..
some lines in this touched me deep inside..
thanks for sharing:)

[Still To Witness]

wow, this poem is amazing!
it gave a sense of adoration and love, to just get away from everything and be with the lover where you can't be afraid of anything and you feel no pain.
Wonderful piece, i love this one! :)

[Magdelena]

Ahh this is sweet, loved the imagery. You have such a way with your words that makes me just want to sigh after done reading.. Beautifully crafted..

Hugs
Mags xx

[SpokenWord]

Water is said to be a healing power, or cleansing power. To me this poem speaks to how our past hurts and heart breaks could have stopped us from realizing new love but the rains came and washed all that away taking away our fears and that is why if felt like being pierced by knives. Lovely poem indeed.

[emmajoy]

Seems to me that your words conjur wild happenings, where emotions match surroundings until there's no going back.

'Trees sway' .. there's strength in togetherness.

[Brook Hughes]

I love this poem it is so beautiful. Especially the repitition in some of the lines. Great Write! Keep writing and I will keep reviewing!