Whisper if You Must

i may not know you or your situation i may not have the right words to say but i got a pair of ears

 

Don’t lie to me

No not again

I can’t stomach another

Sweet glamour

 

Show me your true face

And do not fear

I’ll listen to what

You want me to hear

 

Even if I won’t like it

Even if I may pout

You’ll feel so much better

If you let it all out

 

So what if you hate me afterwards

My feelings of you

Could never change

So tell me why you feel this way

 

Tell me to get lost

If that’s what you want

Call me a name

If that’s what you need

 

SCREAM

LAUGH

CRY

 

But don’t leave it all bottled in

And secretly wish to die

Whether you realize it or not

Someone loves you

 

Someone cares

Maybe I could

If you’d be willing to share

Open up

 

If not to me

Then someone else

One person please

Before you end it all

 

with a suicide note

Author's Note

Honestly...what do you think? Have you ever felt this way?

Reviews

[Nik Dendera]

"I can't stomach another
Sweet glamour"

Very lyrical that line. Creative in its language and structure; I really liked this piece.

I've felt that way many times, then gave up and thought that if they wanted to be stuck in their little man made hell, then let them. Only so much you can take before you have to let them decide the first move.

The ending is very powerful, pulls no punches! I can imagine this as a song, almost.

[A sea person]

Brilliantly well written! Thank you for submitting it to the contest!

v.r.
Ryan

[Lynx]

No...
I'm mostly the one people think would kill herself. -_- The other day my mom burned my stuff, and my brother later admitted that he went up to my room to check on me coz he thought I was gonna kill myself, ppssshhhh seriously. (I don't give up on these things, I seek revenge, MUAHHAHAHAHA, xD)... Also I never let myself trust and therefor love anyone enough to actually feel that way.. so xD.

I really love this poem, not cheesy yet shows an extremely deep sort of love, the kind that could never be beaten, showing determination. This is the kind of pure unconditional love that rarely exists in anyone, so you must be QUITE passionate about this person, xD.

I love the flow, structure of the poem, it's really nice, short and simple; and yet the words stab into a reader's heart like an unexpected kill

Ok I'm writing too much, xD,

Lingga

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

I agree with Dawn, not clear what's happening,
so much vivid emotions,
it creates a want to save, and I feel like that with a friend
as a suicide metaphor, he always drinks, and it kills me inside,
great work unspokenguilt, mishy

[These Haunted Hallways]

WoW! This was really amazing! Oh, yes, i know i could relate. Ive gone thru this many of times. It hurts so bad, and it feels like ur frozen, and that nobody cares about you, and you feel all alone. Very terrible feeling. This was an awesome poem! Great job!

B.A.

[QuietPoet]

I have felt the same way.. Sometimes I try to get my friends to tell me things, they can trust me more than anyone. Sometimes I think they dont want to bother me any more. But They have never bothered me. This was a great write. Keep it up.

[C.J.]

well i think alot of people have felt this way u exprsed it well good job.

[Mysty Rayn]

This is so great. You put it together in a unique fashion. I like your view point here, to let it out. Some of us do bottle up too much, before we realize it's too late. Great work.