Falling Tears

 

F

            A

                        L

                                    L

           I

                       N

                                   G

 

Too hard for what she cannot have

SCREAMING out loud when she comes undone

                                    CRAVINGS too BOLD to where she cannot touch

            Needing so much but taking so little

                        YEARNING too bad from which she becomes numb

          Feeling…alive but living so brittle

Doubting too often, as the end comes near

SMILING so sweetly, but fearing the TEARS

                      

Author's Note

:)

Reviews

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

I like the aforementioned paradoxial element. I think it represent confusion. Indecision. It adds meaning and emotion, and...realism to the poem. In a way, it makes it personal, because we can relate to it.
All in all. Very nice. I like the rhythm set up by your rhymes. Very entertaining.
Kudos.
-Azza
P.S. Thanks for the reviews.

[Nontani]

I really like the way you expressed the message in this poem. I can definitely relate to what's going on here. I feel that this piece is a little paradoxial, although I'm not sure why. And now, time for a random comment:

You have the same birthday as my mom (Not the year, course).

Anyway, I love this.

Frozen Angel

[Butterflymom]

Wow.....I can relate. This is very well written, and the sentiment wonderfully expressed. Well done.