OH Weather

This poem is about that day weather which made me happy on that day i wrote on.

Oh weather how pretty you are,

Today,

The prominence of clouds and the shiny day,

You make me smile.

The birds are enjoying and singing,

Flying as they are exulting,

Oh weather how amazing you are,

Today,

You just made my day.

Author's Note

Hello I am emma i want you all to read my poem and give reviews on that ,so i would be able to work more efficiently and will get courage.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

if this is a first penned, it is not that bad. You could definitely play with it a bit, for it does seem a bit too short for something that appears to be so grand, and also certain lines could be expanded upon to better paint the picture (the grammar is not quite there yet to perfectly understand what you're wanting to say). However, on the whole, it's a good simple ode to that particular day, and the repetition at the end is golden. (I would suggest also that "you are making me smile" be reduced to the stronger "you make me smile".....reads better and it better echoes the final line). Well done!

[Emma]

Thanks for this review. Yes this is my first poem and i will do much better than this next time.

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And you made mine. Very delightful poem full of love and positive shining . Easy to read and enjoy scenery in my head.

[Emma]

Thanks alot for your awsome review.

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You welcome you make great job here.

[Emma]

Thanks alot. Please check my second poem and give review on it. I hope you will like it.