the space between what matters

the space between what matters

consternation constellations

stars circle like vultures

under a bad lunar rising

and the quarter moon leaves

three fourths of my heart

in total blackness,

admonished

for letting you go

when you could have been the comet

shooting across my sky

making me relevant.

erin-cilberto

11/28/15

Reviews

[ExquisiteEyes]

Beautiful. We all have regrets in life and somehow these regrets define our lives.
' when you could have been the comet
shooting across my sky
making me relevant. ' -- these lines were wonderful and touched my heart.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Exquisite Eyes...
j.

[B. Boileau]

Life is full of regrets and what ifs. But like the title says it's the space between that matters.
A moving piece with (as usual), excellent metaphors
bill

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, bill,

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Does someone else make us relevant? Shouldn't be that way, but it is. Regrets....we all have them. Truth is, we often see the past through rose-colored glasses. I liked the celestial metaphor here. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.

j.

[DIVYA]

A darkly beautiful poem filled with regret for what could have been. The emptiness and listlessness comes through very well. Appreciated very much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, DIVYA...
j.