the gentle fall from the cliff

the gentle fall from the cliff

i have a random exactness

when it comes to your heart

i am obliviously cognizant

of my feelings,

deliriously scared,

emphatically unsure

intuitively absent of sense

and mostly,

carefully unconcerned with the risk,

i feel like falling hard on the pleasured pillows

even if they end  up,

filled with rocks.

erin-cilberto

1/18/15

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

To fall so hard, completely, and swiftly is the most exhilarating love of all. The reckless abandon throws caution to the wind; and whether we land soft or hard, it doesn't matter. It's that leap of faith that makes it worth it all. I really love this, particularly the ending. Beautiful!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nicely said, Linda...your response is better than the poem itself...

j.

[softlyfall]

the heart falls, the spirit rises but, in the end, enduring love grows slowly lest it suffer the fate of the firestorm nova and burn itself out.

[W.k.kortas]

From the title to the delightful wordplay that follows, you illustrate a very basic truth--the notion of a loving relationship has more than a little of the oxymoron to it, and yet we keep jumping even though we know the rocks are all but certain to be there. Tight, taut, and true.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we do...thank you for your words, W.k.

j.

[Corset]

to fall and to be dashed upon the rocks of love, what a way to fly :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Corset, for your words.

j.

[...]

a man with no scars is a man that hasn't lived. I hope them pillows are full of comfort and love

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, lynn....
thank you,

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Taking leap of faith can bring the pain of hard times, but given time it will lead to the comfort from believing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words,Dale.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Clearly obscure.
I'd say, in this relationship, you don't hold many of the cards.
Cleverly and creatively composed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy---

j.

[h d e rushin]

"this abstract toying with the loves moral argument suggests a perspective on modernity powerfully at odds with William Wordsworth's 19ht century dictum that poetry be emotions recollected in tranquility".
It is not always tranquil and it does not always allow your soul to land upon the rocks safely. Yet it
is always the stuff of good embellishment

well done my friend.....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...and i like the allusion to William...

j.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Well that surely is taking a leap!...all this time I thought you were just a tease, hee hee!

[softlyfall]

The juxtaposition of polarities works really well. Seems a little more deliberately a balance of opposites than even your usual catachresis. It feels like the synthesis creates a vibration.
I love the ironic added balance of opposites in the last stanza, "falling pillows" "end up"
I know you are a well respected poet on this site, but I wonder how many people know just how really insanely good you ARE?