soft step

soft step

tip-toe into love

keep your balance

a ballerina's pose,

pirouette slowly, very slowly

if the dance director smiles

you will fall into your partner

on the final turn

and fuse as one

from the improvisation

your hearts.devise.

erin-cilberto

3/27/16

Reviews

[Nisreen]

The delicacy of two
is so particular
like a beautiful dance
every move matters
every word
every breath

an invitation to treat a lover
like a ballerina's dance

so soft indeed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your poetic reply, Nisreen.

j.

[...]

This is absolutely beautiful, Jacob! I love it...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn.

j.

[Matching Socks]

Such a beautiful picture this is. I see a happy ending for these two.
I think this is one of my favourites of yours, it's lovely.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ana.

j.

[Cryingkate]

"if the dance director smiles" for me that was the "Wink" that sweetened the poem.

There is a sweet side to the writer showing here that makes ya just want to hug him.
Yes .... By fate or faith if it is meant to be so shall it be.
But it's sure nice to enjoy the dance with someone who isn't pushing and let the hearts match up naturally.
Wow.. what a sweet dance I just had thinking about dancing naturally and the more desirable the guy with self control is.... Ya let the hearts decide, the dance director knows how to match those hearts,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Connie...

j.

[Fernando Dardón]

Wow, short but sublime!!

I liked how it starts, the metaphor you used: "tip-toe into love".
I guess you can interpret this poem in many ways. But I'm gonna see it this way: to make someone fall in love carefully, in a delicate way, just like a ballerina does. The interesting thing is, according to this point of view, who is the director? The girl whose whatching your actions (or the boy depending on the case)? God maybe? Life?

I wonder if it is possible to improvisate in love...

I'm sure there is still much fabric to cut from your poem, it is very deep, and has a great background where mind and thoughts can dive in.

I liked it a lot!!!

Javier

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, and kind words, Fernando...

j.