identity theft

identity theft

 

 

 

empty wallets

fat love accounts

 

then early withdrawal

 

no dismissal compensation

just the penalty of

 

empty wallets

short on cognitive cash

 

long on expensive regret.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/16/16

Reviews

[Shannon]

Extended metaphor I never would have believed could work so well, without seeing it. Somehow feels more like "lesson learned" than bitter regret. A few words paint a varied picture.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, S.

j.

[Ronald Mathews]

Every identity thief should be reminded of this when they steal another's identity.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review, Ronald...

j.

[Ronald Mathews]

Your welcome and thank you for reviewing my stuff too, I am new to writing online so I was pretty nervous commenting on other peoples writing.

[Country boy183798]

I think regret is in a way like a battle scar. There is often a story behind it, a story that has played a big role in defining who we've become, and regret teaches appreciation.
A great poem, and a clever one too! it's not a long one, but it certainly does say a lot. Thank you for sharing it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Edmund...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, yes, regret is way too expensive sometimes, isn't it? The metaphor is super. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi...

j.

[Usman Muhammad]

Regret was strongly expressed in this poem. Very strong writing, the way you summed up your thoughts in such concise words is amazing skill.
Once again excellent piece of writing with thought provoking message.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Usman.

j.

[aLittlePain]

A crushing reality for many and that old friend regret is always there....sigh

I love the way you've expressed this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your kind words,

j.

[Zugzwang]

It's sad when love doesn't work out....then we have all the time in the world to reflect and pay for the mistakes we have made. Well said.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, and it's too much time to reflect, isn't it?

thank you, Z.

j.

[DIVYA]

I wonder why the dismissals are so premature. Never see them coming in time. Regret is always a by-product as you said, a very expensive one. Amazingly said.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, really wasn't sure about this one...almost threw it out...

so you are encouraging me to keep it.

j.

[DIVYA]

With me, the words struck a chord. So I would surely say, keep it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for that.

[Matching Socks]

So true indeed Jacob, so very true. The harder you try the more you'll wind up paying for it. In more ways than one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, thank you for your words, Ana.
j.