hyphens and moon dances

hyphens and moon dances

 

 

finally happened,

the inevitable

last night, 

the muse and i broke up,

 

but then we talked

one thing led to another

and we ended up

on the sheets

 

there were ellipses of eloquent touching

there were punctuation glitches that felt "oh so good"

there were adverbial phrases tossed away like pillows

 

and through it all that complex sentence we are together

became a simple situation explained in an

essay of understanding...

 

we will always need each other.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/19/16

Reviews

[Carolynn]

An affair with writing is one that is hard to destroy even when it's ignored (guilty blush)
Wonderful as always :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Carolynn.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah yes, your forever love....words. Obviously the muse enjoys your company as much as you enjoy hers. Long may your relationship reign! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi..
j.

[Rita L. Sev]

"The muse and I broke up..." - Perfect way of explaining it! It is equally as painful, and that pull to get back together is super-glue strong...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, super-glue strong....hey, good to see you, Rita.

thanks for the comment.

j.

[aLittlePain]

Very nicely done Jacob!
Love the analogy, right on point

Rach x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Rach.

j.

[JayceeC]

Smiling. You make punctuation sound sensual. Oh the love affairs we have with those damn fickle muses. I haven't quite made up with mine after this current argument, but it's always a coup when I do.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jan. The arguments can be never ending.

j.

[ms. barrie]

stunning write! intriguing yet dreamy write...love your word - weaving, and rhyming scheme...your poetry is always inspiring...yet very unique. not to mention...i adore the titles of your poems...they always catch my eye.

the muse is as elusive as neptune...butterfly wings...if you do not give her/him the attention
they need...they fly away (it seems) -- always a feast for the eye for me to immerse myself into your ink. thank you for sharing -- barrie -X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, barrie....

j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Very nice analogy, and I have to say, for many of us, probably pretty accurate.:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Yeah ... the muse is a tease but in the end she comes through ... don't go there ... lol:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...yes, she is...thank you, Pryde.

j.

[Norman 223]

Your Muse prompted a subtle twist this time, Jacob. You have imbued your poem with a hint of flirtation leading to a love affair of serendipity. See what it's done to me :-0
Loved it. N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Norman...

j.

[barleygirl]

You've written about the muse a number of times, as I recall, but this one is definitely one of your best on this topic, written with playful passion & perfect personification. I had to click on this one becuz I've been making love with the full moon the last couple nights myself . . . she's been shining thru the oak limbs on just the right trajectory, so bold, instead of shy like she usually is in these forested hills . . . *smile*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, barleygirl...yes, i admit...one of my favorite topics is writing about writing..and perhaps i do it too often...i appreciate your review and how you related ...:)))

j.

[barleygirl]

I write about furries a lot myself . . . *smile*