unsure of the rhyme that cut us in two

unsure of the rhyme that cut us in two

 

 

we hid in the would's

of each other's could's

got lost in the might

left by each other's flight

 

never found reason

for another season

this love had only a spring

and in fall, lost its song

 

as we ventured into the future

torn open like a suture

on a wound

that became infected too soon

 

a melody

of serendipity

 

never meant to heal

a scar that only

pretended to be real.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/8/16

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Another relatable poem -- the sting of some long done relationships can be bitter, despite the brevity of the relationship, and despite the passage of time -- been on both sides of this equation -- a lot of regrets on either end.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KL...i know you understand.

j.

[Robert Haigh]

An inventive and effective write. I like the last stanza immensely!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Robert.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

A rebound relationship never does last, but while it is happening, it can be so sweet. "this love had only a spring and in the fall, lost its song." The regret hangs heavily in this line....some things are just not meant to be. The imagery and metaphor are wonderful here. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi...

j.

[hcarson]

Really like this one, the way you have used seasons etc, flows real well with a lot of feeling in it. Fab!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, h,

and interesting that you used the word "Fab"---

just bought a magazine that has an in depth view of the Beatles, reviews of all their albums--which i pretty much have except for their live stuff...

yes, they were Fab.

thanks again for your kind words,

j.

[hcarson]

Aha see..fab four was'nt it? They are often being played in my house....although i dislike yoko, can't help it.