a happy penance before the credits

a happy penance before the credits

 

 

 

she had an Ava Gardner smile

and i became Dirk Bogarde

leaving the cloth of innocence

on a Saturday night road

where the parking spots

were taken by sedans with foggy windows

and fumbling hands

 

lips met on a movie screen

for backseat extras

and for that one fatal hour

 

i gave up religion

made a quick contrition

and held her tight

 

at dawn,

i heard the toll of bells

felt the confessional calling my name

 

yet all i could think of 

was hers,

the brown eyed syllables of her breath

still softly whispering secrets in my ear

 

secrets even God could not get me to confess,

no matter how the movie ended.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/5/16

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

We need not confess all to God for he knows everything, but it is vital to keep some of our feeling out of the publics ear cause some will try to turn it into something it is not.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, thanks, Dale...

j.

[Paul Bell]

You are so lucky to have drive in movies, though something tells me the movie was irrelevant. You do know God is up to speed on the events that day. Was it worth it. Yes it was.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Paul.

j.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

That is exquisite word-play. The way you describe the lady is impressive- Ava Gardner smile, brown eyed syllables of her breath among others. Some secrets are meant to be kept secret, and the secrets she whispered in your ears will remain secret forever. Quite impressed. Keep writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you , Vatsal...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Love in the backseat at the drive-in movie and confession the next morning? I especially liked, "the brown eyed syllables of her breath". Some things are better left as memories only WE cherish. No one needs to hear them and judge. Good one. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.
j.

[Nisreen]

Romance can be this dark movie at times
and the bright sun at some other moment

The drama of love
Its enchanting and beautiful

Enjoyed this piece :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Curiosity.

j.