Inaudible Whispers

Inaudible Whispers

 

 

 

secrets,

decrepit composure

eyes hiding shadows

 

everyone's about their day

but i can't toss the night of you

over my shoulder,

 

so i carry secrets

and hush others' stares

with a stolid gaze

 

inside i'm still outside your heart

but zip us into embrace

just for show

 

they will never know,

and i'll just keep walking

into sunsets

 

like i have some idea

of where i am going

 

a secret

my own heart keeps

from me.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/24/16

Reviews

[Bala Gorthi]

A very nice work, very rightly expressing the state one undergoes when our own heart gets captured by such feelings. The way we try to hide, the condition of our shaken self, all that is very well put in your Poem. Loved the lines:
A secret
My own heart keeps
From me.
Thanks for this work.
Keep sharing and keep writing.:-):-):-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Bala...

j.

[dan]

such wonderful wordplay, excellent whimsical musings from a poetic heart. my compliments, jacob. take care...dan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, dan.

j.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

Hey can you hear this? Superb...the ending blew me away

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rico...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

We often fool ourselves and show a mask to the world....a costume that protects us from ourselves. Wonderful! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi.

[Ange Faith]

The time of meditation and the depth of thought marks this as excellency. This is regal.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ange...

j.

[WittyWonka]

This is sadly beautiful and hits home. That last line is truly and brilliantly profound. Man, this is one of those moments when I wish I had written that.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Witty...

j.

[JenniferMarie]

Wow Jacob. This is truly profound. I got teary eyed.

A secret
my own heart keeps
from me.

so many images. so many sentiments that love grants us.

Happy to have read this.

[JenniferMarie]

I'll be honest. The way I read it was when a man loves a women or women loves a man how sometimes he or she doesn't say it. Sometimes it's a secret, sometimes it's hard to say everything we feel and sometimes we don't know what to do with that secret even our own hearts keep from us. That's how I read it and may be wrong, but that's what I saw in this beautiful poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like your interpretation...and there are no wrong interpretations...it is how each poem speaks to each reader...

thank you for your words...

j.

[JenniferMarie]

Thank you Jacob and of course you're welcome. Always great to read your poems.

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This could be a secret affair, a marriage not much more than a mirage, an infatuation...
I love how wrote it, Jacob. Metaphorically mysterious :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, lynn...

j.

[aLittlePain]

The lies we invest in...been there and in a manner still there. Powerful piece of writing j. R xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rach.

j.

[1VJ]

Secrets are treacherous fare, especially the ones we won't even divulge to our own-selves.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paloma...
j.