spill

spill

 

 

drop me a line

into the soup

contract, murky manifestations of love

 

i am Campbell's confused child

you are my teacher,

but affections float like stale crackers

in my bowl of you

 

am i just an ephemeral lunch

a noon take-out,

or might i be an elegant entree

later when the magic wears off

the napkin is smeared with yesterday's old melodies

 

the paper smudged with doubt

i might wait patiently in the cupboard

 

or just reach my expiration date

prematurely...

like a song that spent only one week on the charts

then disappeared silently

into nothing.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/3/18

Reviews

[sL]

The speaker here is so beautifully and honestly confused—unsure weather they’re a casual lunch or... more—completely unsure of how they will react over time. A perfectly relatable, simple/complex poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, sL...
j.

[duff]

Clever and precise. I like the attitude.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, duff.
j.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Leftovers from a forgotten meal, morphing into an unrecognizable memory that stinks up the entire fridge.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

have to clean out that fridge, soon, don't i.

thank you, Valormore.
j.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Mixed the metaphor at the end. 'like a song' Was the song about soup? -- 'like yesterday's asparagus, gone limp.' Now that would bode well with the context.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"the napkin smeared with old melodies"

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

How stupid I am. I read 'old memories'.

[Chris Shaw]

I have this image of a can of Campbell's condensed chicken soup sat on an otherwise empty shelf in the cupboard. It is such a strong image that I can't erase it. Some people really like soup for lunch, as a starter for an evening meal and I've even known a few who have it for breakfast. This poem creates a feeling of rejection and loneliness. Your poetry is so multi layered Jacob, I think I am becoming an onion peeler.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hope peeling the onion doesn't sting your eyes...peeling them does that to me...
thank you, Chris.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

No eye sting from your layers Jacob.

[sette]

i like the cream of mushroom with croutons that is already a heavenly lunch for me but seriously the words here are magnificently written the flow of words is smooth there is clarity in both words and thoughts

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, sette.
j.