Splash---Natural Delivery part 2

Splash

blue serenade

but the notes are colored crimson

the blood runs against vinyl sheets 

seeps into the white

the color of me

and the poem is read.

erin-cilberto

7/31/19

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

This sounds ominous. Should we be worried? O_o

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no....just poems...like an actor does, i use past experiences to conjure up food for themes for my poems...
j.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Whew! For a minute there, I was .. well, you know. Empathetic reading is a b***h.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the best thing that happened to me about 40 years ago was when i learned to distance myself enough from the emotions, to play with the words....but i know what you mean...
i read some posts here...and do worry myself...i can't help but let that empathy slip in...

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

It's a mixed bag. If I turn it off then my comments seem distant and are sometimes interpreted as uncaring or at best unthinking. If I let them have free-range then I seem to get philosophically smarmy and, oh lawdy, is that a cringe-worthy hoot. lol But, I agree, it slips in and nothing to be done about it. Sometimes, it's a good thing because there a feeling like it was wanted, perhaps needed, and you did something positive with your words. You know?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i am big on interpretation...open interpretation..and on my pieces like to see where readers go...don't want to steer them...and am more than happy if their reviews and interpretation don't match my thoughts when writing...
j.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Yep. Readers rule the roost. :)

[andrew mitchell]

I have imagery of a quill dipped in blood writing about love then folded with a red wax seal.nicely written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like what you saw...thank you, andrew,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Clever. The poem is red in colour. What better colour, poems all have to be read. They must be read.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris.
j.

[Wondering Mind]

Nicely painted with clever word use..
Enjoyed the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Wondering Mind,
j.

[Fran Marie]

Now the poem enters a new phase of life/light complete l iike the Splash! aware of and filled with colorful hues of being read/red..good stuff as always..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Fran,
I am grateful for your encouragement.
j.

[Fran Marie]

So veyy welcome dear friend

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A clever use of word weaves and association. The colours give life to this short but meaningful poem and one cannot help but marvel at the colour of the poem in the end (red).

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John,
j.