Becoming

Becoming

 

 

pretty little arrival

wrapped in baggie clothes

 

Zip Lock ties

binding conscience

 

a possible anyone

                                                   becomes

a discarded someone

 

 

9/6/2020

Reviews

[sette]

the idea of abandonment or being abandon either help or destroy one's self esteem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is absolutely true...thank you, sette,
j.

[John the Baptist]

The theme of abandonment seems to stand out here. It almost makes me think of the old stories of infants being left on the doorsteps of people the parents thought could better care for the child. Perhaps the abandoner is the one whose conscience is bound by the zip lock ties.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really like the last line of your review, John, and agree wholeheartedly.
thank you,
j.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Something led to a dissapointment here. A restriction, a thought, perhaps conscience. A pretty package had to be discarded. Who knows what promising gift it carried?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh, i like where you went with this...thank you, Dhara,
j.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Yes. We never know till we have opened it properly.
You're most welcome, dear Jacob.

[AJNJ]

Conscience to me seems the key to the making or breaking of a deal, especially in prospective relationships.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, especially....thank you, Peston.
j.

[AJNJ]

You are welcome dear sir.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Whether infant or senior, we often disregard those who do not appear will be of any use to us
or, whom we've hastily decided, have too little to offer.
Of course, when that same judgement falls upon us...
Outstanding poem, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and understanding words, Jimmy,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

I'm pro life and this one reflects what I believe in. Hard to discard a small, precious gift for selfish reasons. God's wrath is on the horizon and we see it. Control and adoption are better solutions that that. Excellent sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir Jacob.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I can glean the abandoned baby analogy within this seven line punch of a poem but I also saw abandoned refugee children adrift and alone because of the sins men visit continually upon one another.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, could go either direction, thank you, John,
j.

[barleygirl]

This reminds me of how abruptly we can change how we perceive other people and how squirrelly our perceptions are (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, often our perceptions are totally wrong...we jump to conclusions...way too often.
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Interesting write. Tyfs something so sobering.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cyprian,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Discarded babies, discarded children, all children deserve a loving family. More adoptions needed. It is so hard to adopt, so easy to make a baby. There is a mismatch. Subject close to my heart Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding words, Chris,
j.