the cliff of what if

the cliff of what if

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


the cliff of what if

 

 

 

tainted passage,

 

narrow focus on what you once were to me

 

i took the mountainous route,

 

the terrain impetuous

 

your love perilous,

 

                                    freefalling

 

 

echoes of your grin, tempestuous

 

as you watched me,

 

                                         watched me          watched me          watched me...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/1/2020

© 2020 jacob erin-cilberto


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

I did love this poem Jacob.
"freefalling
echoes of your grin, tempestuous
as you watched me"
The above lines. Good lines to open a song with. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Week Ago

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.
oh my ... the speaker describes his perspective but paints a steely cold heart of the "woman" ... sheesh! treacherous love indeed .. way to easy to slip on the cliffs .. loose rocks ... icy slopes .. killer poem says i!
E.
ps. if i ever met such a woman ... she hid it well from me ;) love and peace brother!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, E.
j.
I feel the angst of regret permeate this as the metaphor takes us on a journey to the summit only to watch the protagonist plunge to his doom. Effective and mesmerising as always Jacob!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, John,
j.
But you landed, and without broken bones, although you had a bruised heart. This was very visual and the watched me in triplicate at the ending works very well. It also gave me the chills that she watched you free fall. She could see it happening. Sometimes I think that is more cruel than walking away. Great piece Jacob.

Chris

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

2 Weeks Ago

thank you, Chris,
j.

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

61 Views
4 Reviews
Rating
Added on October 7, 2020
Last Updated on October 7, 2020

Author

jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



About
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..