Loose Ends

Loose Ends

 

 

and the undoing

heart's wound unwound

pieces strung in effigy

love's apocalypse 

the knots of illusion

unbound shadows

strangers now.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/9/21

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Sometimes it feels like everything already arrives in loose ends (((HUGS)))

[shadrach hah]

The ties unwound and the love falls to the ground in pieces, the shattered heart that once sang in love's domain. The illusion fades and yet embers of what was can remain, ready to be relit by another. The tie is cut, yet love lives on. I love the content of this write. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Hugs always....Mike.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Mike,
j.

[shadrach hah]

You are welcome, Jacob. Have a wonderful evening....Mike.

[andrew mitchell]

The longing and the emptiness of loss is hard to live with until you grab onto someone else’s loose end which is an offering by chance. All our lives are linked by invisible strings and so we’ve are all connected.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like that "chance" idea, andrew...those invisible strings can pull us hard, thank you,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

A Gordian's Knot of illusion ... shadows bounce light into the heart ... strangers no longer.

I have felt that heart apocalypse on more than one occasion.

Nice one friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ted,
j.

[Pete]

ouch, this hurts. matters of the heart messy and never easy.
from lovers to strangers - a rude awakening. is up to us to tie up those loose ends with a double knot perhaps ... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe that double knot might work, we need to try that Pete.
thank you
j.

[Patricia]

and ouch, always a tattered mess from here to there always tripping over it, my heart is in this one, well done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Patricia,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I saw a ball of wool, running away with itself, leaving the yarn trailing in a mess. The unfolding of a relationship. From tight knit to distant. That is always a painful process.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Appreciate your words, Chris,
j.

[Laz K.]

This one is like a riddle and a tongue twister in one. Almost all the words are very weighty, and heavy with all sorts of possible associations and connotations - wound, illusion, apocalypse, shadows, and of course love. I'm not in the right kind of mind today to look for meaning, but I enjoy the play of these heavy words that's like a group of whales coming to the surface for a moment before they disappear again in the depths.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review, Laz...Whales are just
well, no words that can describe their majesty.
j.

[Spamalot]

Reads like the output of a poetry generator, where you give it a few words and it fills in the rest.

I liked Bunthorn's, Oh, Hollow! Hollow! Hollow! better:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your review, Spamalot,
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I read what you referenced...not Hollow at all, maybe Hallow...poets seek to find that which does fill in the rest.

[Spamalot]

Tossing around words meaningful to you, with intent that no one but you is aware of, all too often reads as an all whipped cream pie: pretty, sweet, but lacking in nourishment, almost as if you'd taken Mr. Bunthorns advice in:

If you're anxious for to shine
in the high sthetic line
as a man of culture rare,
You must get up all the germs
of the transcendental terms,
and plant them everywhere.

You must lie upon the daisies
and discourse in novel phrases
of your complicated state of mind,
The meaning doesn't matter
if it's only idle chatter
of a transcendental kind.

And every one will say,
As you walk your mystic way,
"If this young man expresses himself
in terms too deep for me,
Why, what a very singularly deep young man
this deep young man must be!"

[Sami Khalil]

Something is left hanging in its fragile state; Something keeps reverberating in the halls of the heart; Something is bringing back myriads of thoughts and emotions. The narrator dwells in his poetic land that feels like a stranger unto him.
Great brevity sir Jacob...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir Jacob.