Short

Short

evidently the sun took the day off

clouds burst

in a dark room

as love, a burned out bulb

sat waiting

for the next dawn

to clear out the tears

inside the filament

of his heart.

erin-cilberto

5/14/2024

Reviews

[Senu Jayasinghe]

"Sit waiting for the next dawn" I'm sure it'll come some day, because I am waiting too. Only hope can keep us going.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Senu,
j.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Interestingly enough this is the first piece of poetry that I've read in some time, and it tore to my spirit as it captures precisely how I feel right now. Thank you... your words have transcended art for me here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am glad it could touch you, Travis.
But don't like the hurt involved.
j.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Unfortunately, it is the byproduct of a life spent loving and being loved.

[andrew mitchell]

Like the heart how delicate is that filament in the light globe, doesn’t take much to alter its demise.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

So true, andrew,
j.

[iTryToWriteAllTheTime]

This made me choke up a bit, the imagery and diction point toward this illusory hope.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This is nothing short of a heartbreaker dear J. So much feeling in so few words. Masterful.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Chris,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob… it is amazing that we were born to
💗 love and when the light burns out we are left forlorn. Wishing you Candles that keep your Romantic 💜 Heart healthy and hungry for an
Adventure among the Stars ⭐️ tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat...appreciate your muchly.

[John the Baptist]

Love can in a number of ways, be compared to a lightbulb. It can be switched on and fill a once dark enclosure with luminescence. On the other hand, when it finally burns out, there is darkness until a replacement is installed. And, depending on the power of the flameout, that can take a long time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, John,
j.

[Brokensoul]

Heartbreaks are tough, but they help emerge the poet in us. In such a short poem, the imagery is beautifully done. Can't wait to read more.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, they do help do that.
Thank you, Brokensoul,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It's so easy to get burn-out of the heart. But a heart that doesn't burn for something has no passion. It's left waiting for the dawn of day to hopefully clear out the cobwebs of confusion. A short, pensive and powerful write. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Fabian.
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your daughter is such a little lady now, really growing up fast.

[Amy R]

Oh wow, another deep write..

"in a dark room
as love, a burned out bulb" I felt this emotion a little to much.

Great poem
-Amy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Amy,
j.

[Amy R]

You're welcome