Branches

Branches

A Poem by ewest1220
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"One branch that would break on high..."

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Branches

By: Ethan West


The brittle branch breaks

The frozen earth shakes

Speak not of this hurt

It's but a miserable cry


I stop for a moment and wonder

When was thought so gentle placed in thunder?

I take my hand to steal a dewdrop

My tear, from grass where fallen, I lie


I lift up my heart

And continue to start

My hand slides along a new branch

And with a gentle sigh


I lift myself onto my new way

Through the broken earth begged me to stay.

I strive for the top with only one goal

One branch that would break on high

© 2013 ewest1220


Author's Note

ewest1220
This is one of an additional 3 poems from my book that I'm releasing exclusively to the writerscafe community. Thank you guys so much for all your support and enjoy these three poems! Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

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Nice use of words which results in a good piece of poetry..... Well done!
You might want to make a correction or two in this beautiful poem...
"I take my hand my hand to steal a dewdrop" .... Either you can omit 'my hand' as you have repeated or you can simply put a comma.....
Rest assured, it is a nicely penned down poem...

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

lol ya I messed that one up. It was a typo but it's fixed now :) I'm really thrilled you enjoyed i.. read more



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Ah, another poet to watch...to look forward to. Thank you for introducing yourself to me this morning. Do come by my own page--meantime I shall return!


Posted 7 Years Ago


"I lift myself onto my new way
Through the broken earth begged me to stay.
I strive for the top with only one goal
One branch that would break on high"...these are my favourite among all..so ravishing and flows so elegantly...your diction has made it more poewrful in it's effect!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was wonderful. I enjoyed the way it flowed. I find myself leaving cookie cutter responses on other's work. I am going to try and stop that. I just find myself in awe with very few words to say. The climb up from despair is what life is about. Very powerfully written here with a never give up message. Nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Interesting..Didn't turn out the way I expected, and that's what I like about it. I love the use of imagery and metaphors!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brilliant! This piece makes me wonder... in a good way, that is. Painting a simple, but elegant picture you have. I can bet that your book is going to be really, really great. I can't wait to read it. Good luck, and keep writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


It's a great one with good chosen words. Great~!

Posted 7 Years Ago


"The brittle branch breaks
The frozen earth shakes
Speak not of this hurt
It's but a miserable cry" Love it,thanks for sharing




Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

The pleasure was all mine :) thanks for reading!
Stanza 4 line 2 Did you mean through or though?
The depth of thought in this is really interesting. Thankyou for writing and sharing! The whole peice is intruiging to read. Reminds me a little bit of Robert Frost's poem 'Birches' kind of a bittersweet one to read. Wonderful write! ^^

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

It's been awhile since I've read that poem but now that you mention it there are some similarities ^.. read more

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Added on February 13, 2013
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Columbia Falls, MT



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I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I have been featured in about 4 books, have won several contests for my work and currently have a paperback edition of my works. (Titled "A Winter Wa.. more..

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