Our Song

Now I realize that you were trying to write our own song. You spoke real low and gave me the pen. I started writing, unconscious of the fact that I was writing our song..now I wish I could go back to that hot summer day in the car by the tracks, and have the courage to leave the pen in your hands. I would place it in another's-someone who was worthy and who would have written much better with it.
But can't you see that 15 was too young? I wasn't ready for that kind of commitment and I'll never be ready for it with you.

Reviews

[armin]

Our song is the slamming screen door
Sneakin' out late, tapping on your window

Ha. .. just remembered taylor.
Now coming to your write, it was very well penned. Though it looked like a nice story since there was hardly any poetic content but I really enjoyed the write.

Have a good time.

armin. ..

[Kristen Swan]

lol thanks. I love Taylor. The song kind of inspired me to write it. Acutally the person I wrote it about introduced me to 'Our Song.'

[Stephen]

Um.. this write`s written in 2012 & your age was 15 .. Um.. so, probably .. as far as I guess, you`re 17 right now .. in 2014 .. but i`m not sure .. *Wink*

Yeah .. the write`s good but a bit sophisticated with your words. I can breathe in the aromas of love ... love`s just itself so confused around the world because it has no direction to float with these cold winds ... so, it always hovers over the edges of our hearts .. isn`t it? *Wink* .. Well written!!

[Kristen Swan]

Im actually 22 now

[Kristen Swan]

I wrote that years ago but posted it much later

[Stephen]

Ooh cool ..22? That`s damn GOOD BY ME ;) *Wink* .. thank God you ain`t a kid. lol ..
Oh .. well .. check out this statement of yous in your write ... But can't you see that 15 was too young? so, I thought, you expressed your beautiful age there .. lol how funny ... *Wink*

[Kristen Swan]

Lol hilarious

[koty bell]

wow..... true feelings here are shared in ur poem great write:))