Life Ripped Apart

Life Ripped Apart

A Poem by Zach
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A poem about finding yourself from within the depths of darkness.

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If I could find myself in the whirlwind that holds me in its eye,

Perhaps I would find I’m not myself these days,

Who could know the truths of a soul torn apart?

Rolling away always as an avalanche on a collision course,

Crashing like waves evermore upon the shore of the sands of time,

Touching and tasting, but never knowing an everlasting verity,

Combing the banks with a surge of resourcefulness that might find me alone,

Willing myself to rise so known out of the depths of everything that is black,

Tracing the crevices born to the earth to define a life from conception,

Take the paths etched in the ash of burnt and scorched remains,

There will I find bits of myself ripped from the core and strewn across rock?

To rebuild a body and harvest the seeds of innocence in the sediment of my soul,

There might I find myself among the living as one who is filled of the void.    

© 2013 Zach


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"Willing myself to rise so known out of the depths of everything that is black,

Tracing the crevices born to the earth to define a life from conception,

Take the paths etched in the ash of burnt and scorched remains,
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Posted 7 Years Ago


This is an amazing poem. The word choice is marvelous. Great job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Lots of introspection in this emotionally charged write. Moving onward after an illness or a heartbreak is not easy. The "sediment of my soul" will always be there, but you can push it aside and make a better life. Well written psychological words. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


Zach

7 Years Ago

Thankyou so much for your kind review.
Torn apart we imagine, but we're actually not listening. Splendid read and write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love your choice of words. They really pulled me into the writing and in these few short lines, I felt like I was reading a story. The question on the third line - "Who could know the truths of a soul torn apart?" - definitely caught my attention. Still, my favorite lines are:

"To rebuild a body and harvest the seeds of innocence in the sediment of my soul,
There might I find myself among the living as one who is filled of the void."

It's almost paradoxical in its insight. To be filled with the void and yet stand among the living...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Zach

7 Years Ago

Adam your reviews are so thought out, I really apreciate it. I do tend to write my poetry with a str.. read more
Adam Crate

7 Years Ago

Definitely. I really enjoy your writing and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
"on a collision course, Crashing like waves evermore upon the shore of the sands of time, Touching and tasting, but never knowing an everlasting verity, "

An emotive write. You have done a marvelous job...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Zach

7 Years Ago

Thank you, your comments are much apreciated :]
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)
Wow. This is, I believe, a wonderful and beautiful explanation of all the feelings we as human beings are going through. When we are trying to understand the meaning of life - the meaning of us.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Zach

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much for your review, your insight gives me the ability to reread my work and see it in an.. read more
burnhouse

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome.

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Tags: whirlwind, avalanche, waves, crevices, earth, conception, darkness, harvest, sediment, soul

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Zach
Zach

Suffolk, VA



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My name is Zach. When the mood strikes me, I like to write, draw, and take photos. Unfortunately, the mood strikes me more often without the aid of antidepressants. Go figure. Anyways please feel f.. more..

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