The couch revisited

In response to 'The curves of the couch' by Kara

 

Flashes

-of the crashes

In the den

Near the coffee table

As mother and I

Gather for tea

 

“A delicate brew”

She says with a sip

And she squints

As she wonders who

Has moved

The cushions

(Again)

 

                My head still rings

                With seductive screams

                Of when the couch wore

                Our sweat from the night before

 

She looks right through me

While putting down her cup

She scratches her head

And then stands up-

 

“Once again

I must remove

A stained couch

That the damn

Dog has ruined”

Reviews

[Alice]

Well this made me laugh more than any poem I've read in a while. Just right, not trying to hard, really witty and elegant. Its not just funny, there's some really effective imagery as well like "Of when the couch wore /Our sweat from the night before." The whole thing's just incredibly clever.

[Mercury Mirrors]

*giggles* sexy yet kinda funny. I like it ^^.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

hahahahahah I love this too damn much, lol. :)

love the perspective you took here. just sitting with ma, taking tea, with thoughts of ravishment lurking in near memory heheheh :)

even though, if you're going to give credit to a poem, you should at least get the title right :P (curves of the couch) :P

heheheh this is really great though. it's humorous while still being poetic :)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Lol - this is funny...I've read here work - it is great in another way - very sexy - this is just out right hilarious. Thank you for making me laugh.
Light,
Siddartha