____ A Moment in Rain ____

She comes, and she goes…
Grinning merrily, to my woes
Like an enigma, of ancient time
To me, she’s a secret rhyme

Looking out, for her glimpse
Standing here, under this rain
Looking deserted, looking bleak
Looking like an absolute freak

With The world divided in two
In one I live, the other is you
With this heart in random, life in shatters
I doubt now, if anything ever matters

And here she comes, here she is
Sometimes my agony, sometimes bliss
Sometimes my pain, sometimes my joy
Sometimes I feel like a paper toy

I feel like, I am lost
Walking those familiar roads
I feel like, I am committing a crime
By not saying her, you are mine

And the fate plays, a cunning plot
And brings me here, at this spot
Here I am, in this rain
Here I am, in self disdain

And while I was thinking, how
To stop me sneeze, like a cow
I try to calm, my stinging nose
Something buzzed and made me rose

I was surprised, it was my phone
Stunning me, too early, too soon
And then I saw, hands over my fur
The message that came, was from her

And that was what, mattered most
That moment I knew, I was never lost
That was when, I knew, I can
Afford to be, just a bit more insane

She knew that I was out there
And knew exactly, why and where
But before I could have, caught the flu
She said, yes, I love you

A broad deep smile bruised my face
The pain was gone, no sign, no trace
When Life can be distant yet fair
I knew too well, for love’s in the air.

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

A broad deep smile, bruised my face
The pain was gone, no sign, no trace
When Life can be distant, yet fair
I knew too well, for love's in the air.

Oh how I hate that uncertainty in a new relationship. You go first, no you go first...it is frustrating when neither one is yet able to admit their love for each other. Wonderful rhyme scheme in this one.

[None]

It is a real relief to know how guys feel--that it's not just us having these feelings that you word so well...."Looking out, for her glimpse
Standing here, under this rain
Looking deserted, looking bleak
Looking like an absolute freak"
Your whole poem is so honest and loving. I got a great feeling while reading it...it brings such happiness. Beautiful emotions!

[Dezaraye]

This is such a beautiful, beautiful piece! I love the title, which is what drew me in. This is magnificent. Your lines rhyme perfectly and it's so romantic. :) Love is wonderful!

[Celtic Cat]

WWWWWWWWOOOOOOOAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH....................where have I been??? Missing out on gems like this, that's where!!! Oh my gosh I love love love it!!!!!! This is so tender and beautiful and wonderfully written. This, Atif, is going straight to my favorites library!!!!! Most excellent write!!

[Lydia Shutter]

At first this seemed like a poem about a love interest who was ignoring you. By the end of the poem, it seemed she was as interested in you as you were in her. A little disjointed, but the rhyming was good throughout. Lydia