Stay Awhile

Cinnamon ash sillage Left behind in this city of light, Beaded crimson and black satin, But a decoration in the world of goodbyes. Sweet, sweet love of mine, A game of cards, a bottle of wine, Sweep the tears and search for smiles, How I wish you could stay awhile. Dripping pearls and shattering diamonds, We've defied the odds before, With glittering eyes and a haunted grin, We've known all along there's elegance within. The ballad of a dove,

Brightens the twisted roads of love, A letter written with a rose's tail, Is attatched to a sunken sail, Strung to the maidens, pretty and bright, Drowning now from your sudden flight.

But I won't be double-crossed like them,

I'll stay afloat and learn to swim.

So stay awhile longer, my dear,

And whisper words of reassurance

In my waiting ear.

Author's Note

Reviews? Please don't be afraid to be critical. Just don't be mean. Thanks, bro :)

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem totally captivated me. You imagery is pure magic.
The only bad thing about this work that I could come up with...
is that it ended. I loved the balance between the vulnerability
and strength of this amazing spirit. 100(+1)

[Ourebro.]

amazing

[BigDaddySiddle]

it's great; i'm a top man in Darlo, England and i recognise your writing skills!

[Dexter Killian]

Cinnamon ash sillage

A letter written with a rose's tail,
Is attatched to a sunken sail,

phrases like these make me call these amazing
90/100

[Taylor Williams]

i like more about this poem than i dislike...hell i don't know if i do dislike any of it in fact haha. You used great imagery and symbolism, a good easy going rhyme scheme, the pace was nice and i like the sense of longing and ironically a little hope(ironic because of your name). All in all everything was really well done and i will surely read this again

[Jeremy Baker]

I love the sense of longing you explore here. Nicely written!

[SOUL LESS]

This is an improvement over your other poems...I was just about to write you off. But this is really amazing, in literary terms. It combines imagery and metaphors together to portray the feeling behind it. :)

[Kyla H]

Really great and descriptive, very good.

[ब्र&#..]

this was a really great piece
alltid
-Meja

[Hello, Goodbye]

oh what delightful imagery you deliver'