This Is The End

This Is The End

A Poem by Alana Michele

This is the end

Thunder clings to the wind

sliding across my skin

Lightning laces the sky above

An inky stain

Choking pressure

Raindrops dive from the shattering heaven

I’ve lost my breathe

This is the end

My will crackles

Disintegrating

Flesh and bone

I let go

This is the end

© 2010 Alana Michele


Author's Note

Alana Michele
Definately needs work, but I'll let you guys offer advice

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I like what you have as it stands. I think there is alot that is unspoken between the lines here though. Or it could just be my own imagination being inspired by the words you have penned... It's hard to tell sometimes. :)

What I really like about this piece is it's powerful energy. The piece crackles with the essence of a storm and one can easily imagine the soul being torn apart by it's buffeting tendrils of wind, rain and hail.

Deeply Visual Ink!
Wolfie


Posted 13 Years Ago


This is a amazing write.. I enjoyed this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow-a desperate mood here--perfectly written!!!
"Raindrops dive from the shattering heaven"
...and i love this line!!!:-)
...a wonderful poem!!!:-)

james:-)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Really enjoyed this.

Every ending is just the first step to a new beginning.
Antonio :)


Posted 14 Years Ago


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I didn't find anything wrong with it. You came up with great phrases and didn't use any needless words. (something I'm still trying to learn) Nice work Alana.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I absolutely love the line, 'Lightning laces the sky above" thats brilliant imagery, just beautiful!

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is brilliantly written
try to work a bit more on the flow though
But I definitely loved reading the every line of your poem
and I think it expressed the emotions clearly
Good write
~Aaradhya


Posted 14 Years Ago


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Added on April 18, 2010
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Alana Michele
Alana Michele

Harrisburg, PA



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