Nothing

The time 

the place 

to make the space

to make or steal

to f**k up or feel

but not for long

the time to steal 

but not to kneel

or cave or crack

or bend or slack

the change in time 

that makes me mine

and once the old stale blood disintegrates

there will be nothing left to hate

nothing at stake

the place to make or take or steal

the stamp that creates the true, true feel

It's perforating and debilitating

maybe I'm hallucinating

drifting towards something 

I have everything and nothing

Reviews

[Maskedthoughts]

I like the way this makes you think...and I love the flow/rhyming. Good write!

[audrie]

Thanks for the review!

[Mr.Cardigan]

very deep makes me really think about things. i really liked this

[audrie]

Thanks for the review! I'm looking forward to reading your work

[Linda alexander]

there will be nothing left to hate
nothing at stake
Deep message and powerful write, really enjoyed

[audrie]

Thanks Linda - I'm glad you found this powerful - that's a great compliment

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[Inda]

Nothing i can say except, fantastic! I like the sound you created here, flows great and it is just a joy to read.

[audrie]

I'll take it! thanks for the review! looking forward to reading your work!

[Coyote Poetry]

"The time to steal
but not to kneel
or cave or crack
or bend or slack"
I like the poem. The above lines stood out. Sometime we must stand our ground. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[audrie]

of course - thanks so much for taking the time to read it and giving me your review - means a lot!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. It was my pleasure.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, you break the rule that rhymed poetry needs lines of the same length, but this works as the line length makes the phrases fall into holes brillantly, original write, good job..

[audrie]

Thanks Leslie - rhyming poetry scares me - I'm always afraid it will sound too immature or something so thanks for the compliment - means a lot!

[Saddam]

the change in time
that makes me mine
and once the old stale blood disintegrates
there will be nothing left to hate
nothing at stake.

A poetry with deep meaning. Great poem.

[audrie]

I also particularly liked this part - thanks for taking the time!

[BlueDreams]

A very deep poem with subtle twisting of words :) Nicely done :)

[audrie]

thanks for the review!

[BlueDreams]

It was my pleasure :)

[Avinash]

Everything is function of time. Sounds like maths but we all are, every feelings indeed is dependent. Your writing takes it to a different level.

[audrie]

Thanks for taking the time to read this - I'm off to look at some of your work!

[nseddy]

This is amazing!
drifting towards something
I have everything and nothing

The word play and rhyming is exceptional.

[audrie]

thanks for the review - It seems like I flounder back and forth quite often between thinking that I have everything I want and then when the slightest thing goes wrong I think that I have nothing. I'm glad you enjoyed it.