In the Beginning

In the beginning 

there was light

                    a trumpets cry for joy

no eclipse could asunder

the gale breath from our sails

our paths took off on

                         different roads to outer banks

I look for you in every smile,

 in every embrace

the gypsy caravan of my animus

seeks that peaceful

 dove of love

 heatless warmth spins my heart

                          arctic frigid

a  bruised touch scars the soul 

 beyond repair

imparts the spirit with

 dark angels of acrid savor

 tenement ofour being

 now stated of shambles

our shelter of

 paradise

 merely a burnt down shanty

recesses of the conscience

            ...............................envision a revivification

waking essence of massacre and carnage's

accesses/ morose truth

once upon a time character respected

 decorum's decency

led down the groove of polite protocol

                                      and tangled webs

in the end that 

lies in darkness

 

a wounded bitter

                                               pathetic whisper of a whimper 

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

I read this as a lament on the splintering ability of human beings to communicate with each other, everything is virtual now...the heatless warmth was the driving image here for me...the cold feels more real, and more indicative of human nature...the extension of warmth has become a hollow gesture in so many ways...wonderful writing Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

I like your review better than my poem! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Well if my review is that good, it's only cuz I was inspired so much by the poem ;)

[InsanityWriter]

Perfectly lovely. :) I don't know what it is, but something really draws me into this poem. Stupendous write. (:

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks Skittles, must be that whispering whimper! ;-)

[Tarry Franck]

Wonderfully written - another job well done

[Frieda P]

Thanks my friend, glad you enjoyed it.

[Tarry Franck]

My Pleasure

[KAOlmsted]

This is lovely, in a sorrowful sort of way. I see lost love in this. Thank you so much for sharing it with us, Frieda. Good stuff.

[Frieda P]

Thanks the kimmer, always love having you read me...

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure...mutual ;-)

[Frieda P]

xoxo

[SHEEMA HUQ]

quite profound I thought, so well written,
an unrequainted or an ailing love life with ample sophistication
and an ambiguity at the enticingly skilled I think......
you are terribly clever dear Freida!

[Frieda P]

woo I'm jazzing on this review, thanks so much!

[luviva]

this explains and plaintly how life is.. how much of a journey it is..
there comes a time when it needs to go separate ways but when your body wont give in.. if you know what i mean??
reall good write my friend go on..
i will read!!

[Frieda P]

I know exactly what you mean...and thanks muchly!

[Carolann Dowsett]

"I look for you in every smile, in every embrace' Endlessly looking for that love that was lost and might never be found again. Another beautiful poem Frieda

[Frieda P]

Thanks Carolann....much appreciated.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[MAC]

this is just perfect. from the content to the form absolutely brilliant

[Frieda P]

Love your avatar, a friend of mine just painted a very similar picture...thanks!

[Lover Of Words]

What a great Journey you took us one lovely job!!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kelsey, glad you enjoyed it.

[khalid]

very nicely penned as usual..

[Frieda P]

Grazie khalid