Trace My Blood

How I choose to recover from my pain

has nothing to do with you

I will not apologize for that which are not my sins.

not to you, nor any god or force that judges

for where I've been no one should have to climb

these are potholes so deep that are never spoken

where fracture and demolition take place

each small step ascended a mere pebble to you

a majestic palisade of epic proportion

the fornication of my fortress is strengthened

by your blind preoccupation of swaggering bias

the black and white you see is a prism 

accentuated by your own misconstrued perceptions

how I should proceed without caution or forethought

shred in my arteries to bleed a pathway

swim in my blood to pulse a resurgence 

objectify the concept that all is not absolute

take my breath into your lungs with impetus

expel my soul in reverence as the past barbs 

rip to shreds your guts and give you sight

kaleidoscopic view of hell's aversions that dwell

beneath the smiling opulence of my domain

tread lightly in this sphere, it takes prisoners

it makes no apologies, it overflows, it has no end

Reviews

[luviva]

thread lightly in this sphere, it takes prisoners

it makes no apologies, it overflows, it has no end
loved these two lines best for me, you know you took the majestic position here to show that you were out there to do your thing and no body is gonna stop you, no one will receive any apologies for your deeds for it is non of their damn business but your's!
i felt your anger in this all the way through and makes your aim very clear to the reader.
very nice work my friend!!
all i can say is go all the way!

[Frieda P]

Always love your reviews luviva, much appreciated, thanks muchly!

[luviva]

welcome dear..')

[-----]

Owning a right to be angry and feel - express the emotion and hurt. How we react is each our own. Give it to 'em! Hope you feel better letting it out ;)

[Frieda P]

Grazie Leona, this was definitely one of my more cathartic writes I must admit, I purged all over this page! ;-)

[Emerald Seas]

This is fabulous! Love it, relate to it and in my favorites!

[Frieda P]

Sorry you can relate, happy that you liked it!

[Emerald Seas]

Yes, well such is life with difficulties. The first 8 lines or so... Very powerful!

[Jess]

...I'M speechless!!really

[Frieda P]

..Um, I guess that's a good sign.

[Claire Twinn]

Sock it to him ! A seething cesspot of anger, I'm sure he deserves it!

[Frieda P]

Sure did, and thanks for reading Claire!

[creativequill]

a majestic palisade of epic proportion
the fornication of my fortress is strengthened

these lines just stood out to me, I loved them, loved the entire piece of course, but something about those, i dunno

the piece itself is full of intense emotion, anger, travel to a place of strength, one each of us that have been through struggles and traumatic events attempt to climb to. *sigh* wonderful :)

[Frieda P]

Love this review, thanks so much! ;-)

[creativequill]

Always welcome :)

[Annabelle Lee]

Shiver...
Terrifying

[Frieda P]

Sometimes such is life....

[LA Lorena]

An eloquent cry to battle and defend your right to write what you feel, and to feel what you feel, no sugar coating, no denying, no apologies. I do look forward to the day that your writes are less sad and bitter, when your voice lifts in happiness, but when that day occurs is up to you, not for me to decide. When you are ready to move on and leave it behind you, you will. (as much as one can ever do such a thing, that is)

I must say Frieda, while perhaps what you took out of "the advice given" was negative, is it possible that it was just a poorly worded concern for a friend in its intent?(though maybe I am too willing to believe in the inner goodness and good intentions of others)
I just hate to see two people who got on so well together at odds. I'm a sucker for happy endings and fairy tales.

[Frieda P]

It was not one bit of advice that prompted me to write this LA, but all the snarky remarks I encounter, like 'get over it' as if someone stepped on my favorite pair of shoes, you don't just move on when something is part of your psyche, it's not a place I like to visit, it's what lives inside of me...I'd never tell anyone who lost a loved one, to just move on, that's what it feels like to me.

Thanks for your generous review, I do appreciate it.

[LA Lorena]

I understand. Just write..........

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You just blew me away... We are always responsible for our own recovery and the fashion in which we do it only we can decide... I could go on but it would not do justice ti your powerful poem.

[Frieda P]

Awh, thanks Dale, you're such a sweetheart. x

[CS]

Poetry is a mix of emotions. Some of them are nice and pretty and appealing. Some of them are dark and painful and scary. A poet writes what they know and should never apologize for that. If you feel pain then write pain. If you feel love then feel love. We shouldn't have to defend our writing to anyone else. This is not a self help site or a site for pshychoanalyzing other people. It is a POETRY site. We are POETS. We are not psychologists and even if someone was a psychologist, this is not the place to practice that. It is a place to write. That is all.

Again, I will say ask again, when did we get to this point where people think the darker things we write is a cry for help and only fake happy poetry about fairies or something became the "ok" way to write poetry? I just don't get it. People need to worry about their own writing and stop assessing everyone elses mental health on what poem they wrote that day. Who cares?

Sigh......Recover from your pain how you want to and take as long as you want. There is no time frame on that or right way to do it. But honestly, it is no ones business but your own, no matter how many poems you write about it. This is coming from someone who many other poets claimed was not a poet at all but a "gaping wound". I spent a year here writing nothing but my pain. I did what I had to do to find my closure. And I found it in poetry. You are right, it has nothing to do with them.

I LOOOOVE this, obviously. It really struck a nerve with me. Sorry about my rant, LOL :)

[Frieda P]

I loved your rant, thanks for the support Courtney, much appreciated.

[Lover Of Words]

You have done a peice that is beyond amazing i love this so very much nicely done a breathe taking beauty of words that not many of us can speak!! Lovely work

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kelsey, it felt good to purge it!

[Lover Of Words]

haha i bet it did!

[Frieda P]

haha sometimes we just have to vomit all over the place to feel better, ew, did I just say that... ;-)

[Lover Of Words]

Im afraid you did ;-) what a lovely thing for a girl who just stepped out of bed too read yay for vomit! lol

[Frieda P]

LOLOLOL! ha...we can't always make nice you know, sorry for that! ;-P

[Lover Of Words]

Hahahaha your fine its rather funny... :)

[Frieda P]

Whew ;-P

[Lover Of Words]

Aw come on you know me well enough {at least I think so} to know that i can handle a little vomit story ha ;-)

[Frieda P]

STOP now, you've just made me spit out my coffee! hahah

[Lover Of Words]

Hahaha as long as it didnt come out of your nose i think your fine ;-)

[Frieda P]

Bhahaha, you take your funny pill this morning or what? ;-P

[Lover Of Words]

Well yeah gotta take it too keep up with the lovely Fridea or i wont be much fun with out it :]

[Frieda P]

haha I usually double up on mine as to be able to endure life! ha