Peaceful Flutterings

For Lee my baby sis. Gone too soon.

You colored the world

                   with blasts of rainbows

you softened the blow

                  with lovely laughter

  your smile lit up the room

                           like incandescent candlelight

Not a day goes by

                          that you are out of sight

my heart beats

 in the memories of you

echo of remembrances

                       before you took flight

from giggly chubby cheeks

                 to eyes that pierced the soul

you grew before my eyes

                and captured light's essence

Brought a smile

 the whimsy of butterfly flutters

to everyone you touched

 it was enchantment

Divine before your departure,

                  the spirit of an angel even then

         your gossamer wings now unearthly

 and bound for peace

              you took with you every other beat

           of my heart and soul

     I carry you with me in every minute

                of every day with hope

we shall one day reunite

 fluttering harmoniously

 in tranquility

Author's Note

For Lee, there's a big void that can never be filled in your absence, you took a part of my heart with you when you took flight. You called me 'big sis' and I miss hearing that with every fiber of my being, you were, and will always be my 'baby sis'.

Reviews

[Deron Alexis]

wonderful as work usually is probably some background music would have made me cry like a baby really deep writing again accept my condolences from the absolute depth of my heart however deep it may go it sorrows me when you write about her and i feel for you. lost my cousin to "you know what" and regret that i was not there

this was amazing writing well captured well written well done

[Frieda P]

I'm sorry Deron, I know that pain well...thanks for your kind words and support x

[s y e]

Hun, this is so painful for ME to read and I can't imagine how hard it must have been for you. I know that when someone you love and cherish dies, you're never the same again. You miss them everyday, I know that. Just know that your sister will is looking down on you, she is happy for you, she is proud of you!! You're truly amazing and I know from what I read about her, that she was too.

"You colored the world
With blasts of rainbows
You softened the blow
With lovely laughter
Your smile lit up the room
Like incandescent candlelight"

Oh my word! Amazing! This is so sad and touching. Your sister would be proud! A lovely tribute to her!
100/100 for sure!

[Frieda P]

You're too sweet farfalle, love your review, put a smile on my face hon. xo

[s y e]

Awww, at least you smiled hun! :-) xo

[Androglossia]

My parents lost my older brother to illness. Eighty two years later I asked my Papa about it. He recalled Mama weeping and wailing her inconsolable grief.

“I don’t think she ever did get over that.” Papa said.

There had been and will be tears and dreams, my friend. There will surely be wounds that can never be completely healed. And true enough, there are no words strong enough to console and we are powerless to control the involuntary impulses of our thoughts. The good thing is, we are also powerless to control the passing of acceptance.


And for the poem itself, the diction and structure used connect the theme in that without them, the poem would not have the impact that it sends out to the reader. Although you have sucessfully created a solemn mood and emphasized the theme of the poem which is death, the idea of feeling toward the subject is more peaceful and more meaningful than tragic. It is ironic(in a good way) that although death is present, the content of the poem is anything but comforting.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your insightful review and your kind words Maryanne.

[Sheila Kline]

Oh dear, dear Frieda!! I feel your pain in every flutter of a butterfly's wing! There is so much sadness in your heart, and the feeling of loss is that which shall never fade!! Please accept this big, big hug from my heart and spirit to perhaps give you a momentary feeling of peace and love!! Lee lives on in your your words of endearment!!!
I also thank you for being the wonderful YOU that is YOU!!!

[Frieda P]

Dear Shelia a huge squishy hug back to you, for I know you feel my pain on a personal level...thanks so much! xo

[Lily Mae]

My heart as you know goes out to you.. There is no greater loss... I feel it every day..xo xoxo

[Frieda P]

The sadness never goes away, unfortunately we share this pain, thanks Lily. xoxo

[Marie]

This is a beautiful, touching tribute to your sister.

[Frieda P]

Thank you Marie, much appreciate your being on my page.

[quinfinn]

it is a hollow, empty space left in the heart when we lose a family member/loved one. i know this on a very personal level and i feel your grief within every penned word herein. it is only a blessing that you have the gift of writing to help you emote this sense of loss and compassion and do it very well.

[Frieda P]

Thanks quin, your words always bring a smile to my face, even under the worst of circumstances.

[quinfinn]

an i lubs yoo too

[Annabelle Lee]

I'm sorry, Frieda. And I'm sorry for saying that, I know that after a while "I'm sorry for your loss" just won't hack it. But there are times when even I can't find the words to say. I can tell she meant a lot to you and thank you, for introducing her to us, in this way.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your insight Annabelle, it's true but there really are no words, I do appreciate your concern.

[WrittenStarts]

Powerfully emotional. Nicely written. I can feel the sorrowful emotions. I'm sorry about this loss, it should never happen. Stay strong.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kindness.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

people just can't be replaced...i lost a dear friend in december and we had a service for him friday morning...

this poem made me think of him...and the things we shared as friends.

beautiful poem, frieda

you surely keep her memory more than just alive...

these poems breathe of her.

[Frieda P]

I'm so sorry for your loss too jacob, I love my best friend last January also, I'm sort of glad it made you think of all the things you shared. Your thoughts are kind and appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you...and i still expect him to call me one of these nights just to chat.

seems unreal that he is gone...we all miss him greatly and we were all better to have known him.

[kublakhan27]

You will always be her big sis, and the bond you had with her will never be broken by life or death...be strong my friend, I know that's what she would want.

[Frieda P]

Thanks k, yes, I know that's what everyone tells me, she wouldn't have wanted me to be sad, I have thoughts on that but I should probably not say here...

[kublakhan27]

Sorry, I had a feeling you would have heard that a lot, but for whatever reason I said it anyway...