Then You Paused

I used to be your 'tiny dancer'...

Heat of your breath

              on my neck

the warmth of your body

  as we sleep

your arm caresses

           the small of my back

morning will dawn

           and so will dark truth

the look in your eyes

             will tell the story

you used to love me so

time stood still... 

til 'the end of time'

'time' expired

          sooner than expected

  called me 'tiny dancer'

and sang me love songs

         'When I say softly, slowly,

hold me closer, tiny dancer',

 

we go through the motions

                  as though we're still 'in love'

the weight has surrendered

            your kisses and warm embrace

      weakness on my part keeps me captivated

           even when I know you've stopped trying,

my silly notions have me convinced

        i can make you love me again

then you wake with conviction,

 you finally found your strength, 

                 yet your voice waivers

'i don't want to hurt you, but.....'

 then you paused

and time stood still 

Reviews

[Jamie Cook]

*~*~*~* as though we're still 'in love' *~*~*~*

That line I have no idea why put deserved its small frame.....that was my favorite line ^-^ but the whole poem deserved a shrine! *gives you trophy of yourself* Here, you deserve it the Freida Awards ^^ WOOHOOOOO! The poem was awesome the ending made me leedle leedle leedle in a good way, like in a crazy woot woot way ^^

[Frieda P]

Ha you crack me up Jamie, thanks so much for this grand review! ;-)

[Jamie Cook]

Aw welcome Frieda ^^

[Richard John Davis]

well done

[KAOlmsted]

Some men are just rat b******s. Period the end. I like the purging of the system here, get it all out...thanks for sharing this with us.

[Frieda P]

Ha I love 'rat b******s' one of my favorites! ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Mine too ;-)

[Frieda P]

Figures ;-P

[Renée]

Beautiful.. you captured those moments you think will never end & unfortunately you also captured the akward.. till the end of time..." oh wait guess I was wrong darling " love Elton

[Frieda P]

Very apropos thanks so much Renee.

[InsanityWriter]

Great song to go with a great poem. :) Very sad piece, but also very beautiful. (:

[Frieda P]

It was terribly sad Skittles, glad you enjoyed this though, thanks so much.

[Blue Lotus]

Oh breathtakingly beautiful write!....morning will dawn
and so will dark truth

even when I know you've stopped trying,
my silly notions have me convinced

i don't want to hurt you, but.....'
then you paused
and time stood still



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[Frieda P]

Thanks Hanah, glad you enjoyed it, every time I come back to this thread I have to listen to that music...silly me.

[Kajal Gulabani]

So melancholy yet romantic. Liked the flow.. As usual, keep up the good work dahlin.

[Frieda P]

Sweet review, thanks dear one. :-)

[relinashinee]

wow, this is one heartbreaking poem. I couldn't have pictured a more precise feel of heartbreak, than this... wow :) And I hope you're alright...

[Frieda P]

Ha, yes I lived, thanks for the visit and the great review!

[relinashinee]

:) Well, that's good to hear :D

[KeelyJane]

Beautifully captured.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your review Keely, much appreciated.

[Baby Ricochet]

Love fades. Sad poem

[Frieda P]

Sad fact of life it seems, thanks Baby.