~Last Breath

For Lee with Love...

Last thought, 

         last breath,

   last moments

drowning my mind

          in a tsunami of grief

    what thoughts of desperation

         devoured your soul

was your heart broken,

 your mind irreparable 

your spirit severed

     from your force of being?

You took your life,

in an instant...

         other's went along for the ride

suicide kills more than one,

 in your release,

there is no peace

 for those left behind

you wrote your last chapter

        scribbled note tells naught

  your book of life never finished

you will always remain

a brilliant butterfly

   fluttering freely

          in my heart of heart's memory

Reviews

[Deuces]

Wow. This definitely hit hard. My best friend took this life at the age of 23 and I was the one to discover this. Your words feel like they came straight my brain to this page.

Suicide surely kills more than one. It creates a coldness in those around you that really never leaves.

Deep, real piece. Thanks for this.

[Frieda P]

So sorry to hear that Cyntax, 23 is so young, just on the brink of really living life, a real tragedy. And no, it never leaves the heart...if only people would realize this & ask for help...I get the desperation but it's so very difficult in the aftermath of this kind of loss. Thanks for your kind words. My heart goes out to you.

[N!LoC]

who is "lee" .... ?

[Frieda P]

Lee is/was my baby sister...

[N!LoC]

:-(

[Gheeneil]

Reminds me of a great modern poet who took her own life, too---Plath. Many have mourned over the loss and there are those who haven't gotten over it hitherto. Indeed, suicide kills more than one, in a way.

[Frieda P]

Yes that was very sad, this is more personal, thanks so much for reading me Gheeneil.

[Gheeneil]

The pleasure is mine. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Very sad, cathartic piece. Nice work Frieda

[Frieda P]

Thank you Baby.

[KeelyJane]

This gave me chills. Very very well done.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Keely.

[first second third]

this is very moving and me reading this as a person who lives with this same feeling this is very good sad but very well written.

[Frieda P]

I'm sorry you live within this feeling forsaken, it's a terrible place indeed..thanks for the review.

[first second third]

its all fine , but the thing to get you through this is to just keep their memory alive. your very welcome and keep up the fantastic writing

[Frieda P]

I try, seems not many other people feel that way though, especially in light of 'suicide' it's all hush, hush, a taboo subject, which makes it even more difficult....

[first second third]

i get what you mean. if you need anyone to talk to you can always message me. but you can still do it even if its little hints or little remember when statements. its not easy ik but its always worth perserviering and diong the best you can.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for that, so sweet of you....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

As always Frieda well penned.

[Frieda P]

Thank you John.

[kublakhan27]

I'm never sure what to say to comfort you in the wake of such writings, or if there's anything that can be said to that effect...I can only suggest that your willingness to turn personal loss into public art may inspire others in the same boat to not be afraid to express themselves and not spend their lives bottling it inside...that's the worst thing one can do under the circumstances...your way of honouring her is the best way to do so.

[Frieda P]

You're right Steve, there really are no words, it does help to purge on my page every so often...I'm just glad to have dear friends like you to catch me when I fall. Thanks for your sweet words.

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome, and you know I'm always here :)

[Frieda P]

♥♥

[kublakhan27]

:)

[khalid]

i dont think i need to express how much this was nicely penned and such issues because that is something normal in all your poems. i just want to talk about the topic of this poem. losing someone dear to us is severe pain, but i think, at least for me, we never lose any, since we will be there one day..all what happens is, they got dressed and went down some time earlier than us..our turn is coming..
i hope you can get over that feeling. i like the feeling of sincerity and loyality expressed here to someone who will never see it..

[Frieda P]

I thank you kindly for your review khalid, one can only hope, since none of us knows what happens after we leave this earth truly...

[khalid]

true..this is the only place nobody has ever been back from to tell us what is waiting there for us..

[quinfinn]

i really understand how this subject affects you , so i am loathe to dwell on the obvious, as so many others may...and i must simply say...well written ...the grieving never ends, frieda, as long as the love remains, so does the sorrow. sending hugs across the miles...

[Frieda P]

I know you read me, and have lived in these words also, thanks for your support and love always quin. x

[quinfinn]

always....pinky promise

[CS]

As long as you give it a voice, you are honoring the memory.

[Frieda P]

Never thought of it that way Courtney, thanks so much for that....