~Fierce Hush

there's a fierce hush aloft my heart

it flew the wings of love until~

the promise inside crashed and burned

now all i can do is play the saddest tunes

the sounds are haltingly wry

as if butterflies escaping certain death

as they flutter by your stark indifference

Reviews

[David Scott]

I can see this magical butterfly. Trapped insde a building of expectations and approval. She should be wild and free. Landing only to drink in fresh nectar and finding her way to a "home" that is a natural draw to all who share her "kinship". It is the weight of us all that she carries that leaves her to "flutter" on the floor of unlit hallways. Ah, but with the slightest breeze through the smallest window, she will feel a "fierce" longing and be born again to the clouds of her purpose. Let her rest in the "hush" intil she feels that welcome and know it is her calling. It may just be the rest she needs to fly to her highest reach.
Loved the write Frieda. You pull the words out of my own heart.

[Frieda P]

Hey David, I truly appreciate you from the bottom of my heart, but your review shouldn't be better than my poetry! Geez, what I meant to say was thanks so much, you're awe inspiring in your responses. xo

[David Scott]

Again Frieda, your words are the wings that carry the hidden thoughts from my mind. You inspire dear.

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and poetry was beautiful. I like the strong description. You create good vision and made me think. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thank you for the excellent review John.

[Jack...]

There's a kind of hush...all over the world, tonight.

Frieda, the sadness is overwhelming in this piece, though I do know that if the butterflies were escaping certain death, they were flying to the sfaety of your arms.

[Frieda P]

This made me smile Jack, thanks so much.

[Claire Twinn]

Eloquently sad, beautifully expressed. How could he?!

[Frieda P]

Indeed! Thanks Claire!

[Ken Simm.]

Evocative and sad Frieda. Truly heart rending and strongly written through that.

[Frieda P]

Always appreciate you visit and kind words Ken, thanks so much.

[Pete Langley]

There is a tangible quietitude to desolation you have really managed to capture here, Frieda. I have one tiny suggestion. Should, perhaps, "escaping" be "escape"? luv P.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pete, not sure if I agree, will have to think on that one.... I thank you for your suggestion and sweet review! x

[icelandicblue]

This speaks to me on so many levels. I felt deep loss and a lack of hope that what is done can never be again. This is both beautiful and bleak.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciate the word bleak, it's such a strong word, isn't it, thanks so much for your thoughtful review.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow Frieda your heart is practically bleeding onto the page. A very moving write.

[Frieda P]

I'm messy like that sometimes, thanks Carolann. :-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome Frieda. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Whoa this is deep and hurt Frieda. Well told as a woman 'scorned' ? As always written with feelings soaking the page.

[Frieda P]

Thanks John, always appreciate your review.