Stunning collaboration, Frieda and Jack both!! Both of you have composed some incredible imagery for this piece (which I happen to be partial to in poetry).
Jack, I love your "dark side," so to speak, with its "deeper shade of black devoured your soul." And just as much, Frieda, I love your "light side," with its "fireflies flicker," and "tears evaporate in reflected heat," and "dawn's sweet zephyrs on jeweled beams." What an intense combination of positive/negative images, so romantic, loving, and adventurous!!! Ooh, I'm just gushing. :-P
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Jazz'd you enjoyed this collaboration, but Jack was the light, you know where that leaves me ;-) Tha.. read moreJazz'd you enjoyed this collaboration, but Jack was the light, you know where that leaves me ;-) Thanks muchly Eric....!
Frieda my friend.. You are so simple with your worlds and understanding on such a great topic
I'm so pleased I got 3 read request from 3 different poets here on WC.
I must admit you have all of them falling for your excellence and wonderful though flow.
They way you wrote this is so unique. I love the way you present it.
Masallah (Bravo)
You made me stop and read this 4-5 times I will share this poem with my friend and colleagues at work :)
Keep sharing such poems.. Well done :)
- Singh :)
100/100
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11 Years Ago
Thanks so much my friend. I loved writing this with an amazing poet like Frieda. much appreciated.
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Wow, I'm humbled Singh, thanks so much for your kindness and friendship always my dear friend. :-)
Good music and outstanding poetry. The moon allowed us to dream and write. Pink Floyd took us to the dark side and make us want to stay. Thank you for the music and the poetry.
Coyote
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11 Years Ago
Thank you my friend for your kind words to us. Frieda is so talented and any chance I get to write w.. read moreThank you my friend for your kind words to us. Frieda is so talented and any chance I get to write with her I jump at.
Great images, great layout and a solid collaberation.
Although I have to say Frieda that with the first line I had forgotten Pink Floyd and was stuck with Procul Harum.
I think collaberation is a very hard thing to due as each writer has to not only create but create in such a manner as to compliment and complete the other. You did that here.
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11 Years Ago
Thanks Steve, she is an amazing poet to work with.
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Procul Harum would have worked just as well, thanks Steve for your kind review.
Beautiful collaboration.. I love the juxtaposition of the dark and the light.. all my favorite words that I associate with you two.. butterflies, zephyrs, indigo, the moon, sonnets.. gorgeous work here!
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