Crucified Little Earthquakes

~inspiration Tori Amos, Crucify

looking for my savior to undo me

under the rubble of victims remission

my chained heart nailed to a cross

lust'd sheets beneath the dirty streets

crucify myself lookin' for imprinted adoration

little earthquakes of my soul unload'd

save me from myself and these blood tears

my heart thunders like a roller coaster ride,

struggle to captivate your poetic prowess

never good enough to leave my impassioned stain

severe'd connections in feeble breath's wake

washed away in torrents within ocean's depth

castles crumble in the chaos of my mindless muse

Author's Note

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Often times we crucify ourselves over the pain others have inflicted on us. The act of confronting and dealing with the trauma on a daily basis is its own torment. Layer upon layer of suffering is expressed in your words with such heart breaking clarity.. x

[Frieda P]

Yes exactly Red, thanks so much for your kind words my friend. x

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sometimes we need little shaking up.Nice if a little on the dark side Freida.

[Frieda P]

Yeah and sometimes we need a slap upside the head, just saying, thanks Vidya. ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha you have a point there :)

[Frieda P]

Ha I knew you'd agree with moi. ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Of course great minds and all that lol

[Frieda P]

Exactly hahaah

[Vidya Bacchus]

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[Vidya Bacchus]

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[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I can relate with the concept. Sad but written beautifully. Love the music video, too.
Thanks for the share.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dhaye, jazz'd you enjoyed this one.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

"little earthquakes of my soul unload'd
save me from myself and these blood tears
my heart thunders like a roller coaster ride,"
I like the above words. All of us need a few earthquakes to make our life come alive. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks Coyote, glad you enjoyed.

[MsJewel]

Even when you write something sad and dark, I find elegance and beauty in your words. Your talent never ceases to amaze me. It is always a pleasure to read "you".

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

So sweet of you to say, thanks for your kind words Julie. :-)

[Blue Ivory]

Oh God, Frieda! Where DO you find the inspiration for so much sex writing? I could never come up with so many metaphors for lust! Another great write!

[Frieda P]

Okay that just put a huge smile on my face, ha...grazie mille Siren!

[Ahena MK]

Really good... had a feel ...
enjoyed the read !!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ahena!

[icelandicblue]

We are very often our own worst enemies, but we can only nail ourselves to the cross to a certain extent and there we hang. You've captured this one perfectly; we all need help but where do we go to find it?

[Frieda P]

Sigh, good question Anne, I don't seem to have any of the answers these days...

[s y e]

I'm back in my little safe haven, I should just here within your poems where everything is fine and the world is a better place, ha!

// my heart thunders like a roller coaster ride,
struggle to captivate your poetic prowess
never good enough to leave my impassioned stain //

Wow, your writes are so powerful Mama F, I adored this one, it blew me over to Jersey, haha. This is an extremely powerful write.

Flip flops & all that jazz! xo

[Frieda P]

Awh that would have been good if it did, I'll try to make the next one more potent so you land here....thanks muchly noodlebumble. xo

[s y e]

Sounds like a plan, I'll be sure to land in your hoose. ;-)

[Frieda P]

Will have coffee ready! ;-)

[Odysseus Wanders]

Really like the poem Frieda.... and Tori Amos.
The sense of internal pressure... is very palpable. It come through the read effortlessly.
The feeling of seeking balance with the 'outside' is present as well...
"little earthquakes of my soul unload'd", great line here, plus in a sucker for earth sciences, earthquakes as these ruptures in the fault occur, to ease tension from deep within... painful, ripping, up heaving.... and cathartic for it.... And tones of longing ring me as well.
Good stuff Frieda, nice work. Love how it moves me inside.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Terry, jazz'd you enjoyed my little eruptions. ;-)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Love your poem Frieda! :) :D

Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kaze! :-)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your welcome! :)