~Translucent Renditions

Mesmerized by your emblazoned words, 

   enchanted within your eye's opalesce glints

  your alluring demeanor entices my aching heart

you are the lavender skies pierce'd with apricot diamonds,

  impetus 

zephyrs that transcend me to scintillating destinations

   riveted in your every echo'd illuminating flicker

the intensity in your raging winds never ceases

  enthralled in your fervent thunder intensifying ocean depths

 my spirit is elevated to new heights in flight'd chimera

carried away in rendition's cast vapors your dimensions provoke,

  translucent peaceful renderings within stellar light's tranquility 

forever surrendering in the intense flames that dance unto my soul

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jack...]

As if standing in the garden waiting for that perfect rose to bloom and before my eyes it appears and it is so much more beautiful than I could have ever imagined. The bouquet of your words my sweet friend is more fragrant, melodically tinted and filled with all of the magic of nature dreams. When you conceive an idea, it forms inside of you, it grows and them it blooms. Soft petals wrap around this dancing poetic score. Lighter than air, as rose petals on a whispering breeze, fliting about like happy butterflies, your poerty is this.

Beautiful frieda...simply beautiful

[Frieda P]

Sigh Jack, there's poetry in your words always, I think you should pen this review. Thanks for the song suggestion, it really suits this one perfectly. Your words kiss my heart in a huge smile my sweet friend. x

[R. L. Hill]

I don't typically comment in others' reviews, but dang, Jack. Love it ^^ lol

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

You are truly a poet for poets! Even the empty spaces between your words have life... wonderful piece, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Wow Travis what an exquisite thing to say my friend, thanks so much!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It's simply the truth, Frieda. ;)

[Frieda P]

If you were here, I'd give you a big sloppy kiss. ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Frieda, are you trying to make all this chocolate melt?

[Frieda P]

Ah if only I had that effect, and I love dark chocolate ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

With your smile and way with words, believe me, you absolutely do (melting some already). ;)

[Frieda P]

Woo you're gonna make me blush you charmer ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Then, I would only be returning the favor. ;)

[Frieda P]

Takes a lot for me to blush, and I don't think I've ever seen dark chocolate blush either ha ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I'll have to try harder... you can't see chocolate blush, you feel it. ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, we're close but not that close ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Ah, how distance teases.

[kublakhan27]

What can I say, you are certainly on a prolific streak these days Mrs.R...your muse has been in a good mood for sure ;P I don't know how to articulate how moving this piece is to me...the richness of your imagery and visions is ecstatically overwhelming. And it starts with the beginning of the first two lines: mesmerized and enchanted...I had a feeling I was in for a special read when they were the first two words that jumped out at me. And the song choice compliments the whole thing perfectly...Mrs.R does it again ;) xox

[Frieda P]

Ha are you trying to jinx me Benji, I'm sure there's some angst coming round in the very near future, you know how that goes my friend. ;-) Your response is enchanting sweetie, thanks so much :-) xoxo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well that makes two of us Mrs.R, you know how it goes with me too ;) Always a pleasure my dear :) xoxo

[Odysseus Wanders]

Man, those verses would best Yani in a battle of heightened energy and swoon.... no matter how big his orchestra... still, pant pant, trying to return to earth.... wowzers!
Great Frieda. Smiles and toes to the sky!

[Frieda P]

Whoa, toes to the sky, now that just blew my skirt up, thanks Terry for this fantabulous review!

[redzone]

Oh My Frieda!!!! Can't sit still, "every man has a place/in his heart there's a space/ and the world can't erase his fantasy"... Earth, Wind and Fire... elements which make up "apricot diamonds and the desire to see exactly where those " impetus zephyrs that transcend me to scintillating destinations" would lead too... This is one of your poems that urges me to say, you are my fantasy Frieda.. I know, you have Vinnie, but ... as hard as I try, I am "surrendering to the 'intense flames that dance unto my soul"... Ok, Ok, calm now, ahem.. (red pulling himself together).. Frieda, it's a wonderful poem.. er.. you will have to excuse me now cause I feel the sponaneous necessity to dance outloud and go completely fantasyland wild!!!! Wanna come with??? ;o) ~~redzone

[Frieda P]

Oh my, how could I possibly resist after this, Vinnie's been canned, history, let's go trip the light fantastic curt!

[redzone]

Oh goodie, Paris!!! Will you kiss me in Paris? Watch the sun rise in Madrid? Make love to me on the Orient Express?? Sigh ... ;0)

[Frieda P]

Good start Gay Paree, we'll play it by ear, but promise we have to make it to the Piazza di Spagna and dance in the Trevi fountain...definite sigh. ;-)

[redzone]

We go there first Frieda and any where else you desire. I thnk your fantasies are more creative than mine ..

[Frieda P]

Oh if we go to Italia first, you'll never tear me away from that place curt....

[redzone]

Ok, then thats where we stay Frieda... don't they say that if you dance in the Trevi Fountain, you dance forever... that sound like heaven to me (the only heaven there is) and and and.. it would be with a "butterfly embraced" woman who is spreading her wings... yep, definitely would find this most appealing...

[Raymond Federle]

Very lovely. Makes me think of food. Now I'm hungry. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha you would, thanks Raymond. ;-)

[Shaquana Adams]

translucent peaceful renderings within stellar light's tranquility
forever surrendering in the intense flames that dance unto my soul

This is very beautiful and sensual. :)

[Frieda P]

So glad you enjoyed Shaquanna, thanks :-)

[Brittany Zedalis]

"you are the lavender skies pierce'd with apricot diamonds"
You are such an amazing writer and this is so so so wonderful. That blue is my favorite color, too! :)

[Frieda P]

You're too kind Brittany, thanks so much. :-)

[Scott Metro]

Very pretty.
Sounds like the man of your dreams..!!...that's a good thing.
Happy you are captivated by his nearness

Scott

[Frieda P]

The object that captivated my desire is poetry wolfie, thanks muchly ;-)

[Scott Metro]

sorry....wolfie gets a stupid star today....I know how man crazy you are..lol....just kidding sugar...

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed the sensual and relative piece you have the imagery locked down, well one, good read.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Thomas, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[nofault-inourstars]

I love it! Unbelievably beautiful! :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks for pausing on my page nofault, muchly appreciated. :-)

[nofault-inourstars]

Anytime ;)