~ If ~

Tattooed in braille upon my heart

a soft quiver of your remembered touch

gently sigh'd shivers down my spine

convictions sketch'd in affectation's symphonies

moonlight sonatas blush'd of tangerine twilight    

shudders within caramel scented spirits' roar 

brought me dandelion's breaths savor'd heights

silver lining's fairy tale wafted to sky's disruptions

precluded of harmony's finale intentions

imperceptible etchings of a once upon my mind 

'if       you only knew, the only thing I still believe in

                                                                         ...is you'

  

Author's Note

Reviews

[MachinaWriter]

I was in love with this piece with that very first line. Tattooed in braille upon my heart. I had to read the poem a second time, because the first time through all I was thinking about was how wonderful that line is. But, once I did go through on my re-reading of this piece, I was quite happy to realize that there were many other wonderful lines with in it, as well. Caramel scented spirits' roar. You have a wonderful sense of imagery, and when you take them in as a whole (because it is so easy for me to get caught up in the beauty of an individual line with this piece lol) you're left with a strong impression of what is being conveyed and enough images to be the basis of personal experience and memories, shared in clever verse and painted words. AKA, loved it. For the individual beauty of each line and for the piece as a whole. Good work ^^

[Frieda P]

Ever since that movie Unfaithful, braille left an impression upon my heart, thanks so much for this glowing review, you blew me away MW! Grazie mille....

[MachinaWriter]

Oh, what a fantastic movie. And it was my pleasure, as always.

And Italian? You have many talents. All I know other than English is Swahili and some French. And only dirty pillow talk things in French lol

[Frieda P]

Ha I can barely speak Italiano, they spoke a dialect in my house and it hardly resembles the true language....everyone knows the dirty stuff it seems ;-) Yes, great movie, so do you think he turned himself in at the end or what?

[MachinaWriter]

I like to think they ran off to Mexico, because I'm a dreamer like that lol

[Frieda P]

Ditto that...her subway scenes made it seem all worthwhile though, not to mention in hi apartment...ooh lala haha

[MachinaWriter]

haha...for sure. I watched the movie because I heard about those scenes lol but then I appreciated the rest of the movie for what it offered even more.

[Frieda P]

She's really a great actor....I wish she'd work more. Or maybe she wasn't acting, one can only hope ha

[MachinaWriter]

Haha, either way is good enough for me lol

[Einstein Noodle]

IF ... is such a huge word .. magnifico titolo ..
then the bird thing ... are you kidding me!!? did you do that? is that yours? ... whether or not it is heart reeling precision says i ... and then the first two lines ... i am tattooed ... its painful and addictive .. the contrast against a soft quiver is remarkable .. and on and on ... i love your poetry and this one is perfect ... makes me want to be the "you" :)) i am so impressed ...
can we run away together now??? :)))

love and hugs to ya girl
E.

[Frieda P]

Not mine, but I know someone who has one, I was thinking of getting one similar with butterflies instead though for Lee, my son is a graphic designer and he's been working on it, but you know how that goes....you do know I'm dancing to amidst the words of your kind response, thanks so much E! Ha, what will the wifey think? ;-) Mwah!

[Jack...]

There seem to be if's in every walk of life, every highway we travel and almost every thought that brings a question to our minds. It is these if's, as in, if I only knew, if I would have listened, if I only had understood, that seem to haunt us the most. "If" only there were a way to eliminate those if's from our lives, I just wonder what it would be like.

Your beautiful poem today asks that final question, after an amazing lead in with your always gorgeous words and phrases, 'If you only knew, the only thing I still believe in... is you" We here on WC have something we can believe in and that is your poetry always touches a chord in our hearts...no if's, ands or buts.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Jack, as always your kind review has brought a smile to my face.

[Tina Louise UK]

Oh so vey beautiful! Loved this one hunni :) x

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Tia, you must be a Notebook buff too. ;-) xo

[Tina Louise UK]

for sure :) x

[Frieda P]

I figured as much reading your poetry....we're suckers for that kind of stuff. ;-) xo

[Tina Louise UK]

haha yup x

[Glen Yumang Manese]

gently sigh'd shivers down my spine
convictions sketch'd in affectation's symphonies
moonlight sonatas blush'd of tangerine twilight ---

I liked those lines...
not that the others do not compliment...
but the start of this gives in...
I could cut and paste a few more...
But lets not get carried away...lol...
I still have a hard time with your font...
but I've grown accustom to it...hehehe...
As for the transition of this work...
and as with your pieces ---
the musical accompaniment...
adds much to the vocabulary...
of your understatement...
I see you like the usage of the word: braille...
also...see that in your other writings as of late...
Thanks again -- for the feedback on my work...Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Ha that's not even the same font you picked on before, oh well you can't please everyone. I do tend to get stuck on certain words, I have favorites and they always bring me a lot of imagery to use in my poem. Jazz'd you enjoyed this one...I'll revisit you again soon, and check out your font! ;-)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

My font never changes...same old song and dance...good to be healthy again...good night...late here in the Philippines...

[Frieda P]

Variety and all that jazz, take a leap! Good night my friend....

[Ahena MK]

This poem is one of your best.... Keep it up ... Really really good !!!

[Frieda P]

Woo doing the happy dance, thanks muchly Ahena!

[Simran Kewlani]

Really good. I love the concept. (:

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Simran. :-)

[Simran Kewlani]

What does that mean?

[Madalyn Beck]

There is so much in life that is fake, even some people. The focus in the world is on the fantasies and fairytales that people yearn for.
Remembering what is real and true, someone you could trust and count on, is the one person you dedicated your last line to.
Beautiful, Frieda. xo :)

[Frieda P]

Sigh, so true Madalyn...thanks for your insightful review and kind words. :-) xo

[Scott Metro]

A lovey write this morning Frieda...
A needful proclamation of love.

Enjoyed it.
Scotty

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Scotty, glad you enjoyed this one.

[Scott Metro]

My pleasure..!!!

[redflutterby]

When all the fairy tales and illusions of life fall away theres few things we believe in anymore. And few people as well....

The "ifs" we sort through like a catalog of possibilities always affects us. That word holds so much power but in reality is very useless. We waste more time on what ifs then we should...its okay to consider things but really we need to put our energy elsewhere.

Your words are lovely and warm in this....filled with true affection and wistful longing for someone missing from your life. Big hugs hun...xo

[Frieda P]

True but aren't the useless words always the one with the most impact....I used to live 'tween if's a lot more, I'm getting better I think, just one that really never heals or leaves the mind. Thanks so much Red. xo

[redflutterby]

I agree....I struggled for a better word then useless. My mind kind of drew a blank..lol...a common problem for me.

[Frieda P]

No problemo, CRS seems to be common these days... ;-)